Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

pass her by.

glance to glance

you'll find no word of
C O M F O R T
to secure your place
in her mind

she wont give you
the signal your waiting for

dont hold steady for the
U N S T A B L E
it will only waste your time

you are broken by her
IMPERFECTIONS
your perceptions are wrong

you may find your place
in ten-thousand hearts
they are yours to
pick & choose

but you confine your mind
to the
T A K E N

together
you set yourselves up for
F A I L U R E

she'll watch
Y O U
pass
H E R
by


Author notes


Written October 18th, 2003

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • poisonsilver
    October 29, 2003
    Edit | Reply
    WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! REALLY awesome poem! I can't express how much i think this poem meens! you have written at least two meenings into it! great job! awesoem! I really like the way you formed your stanzas! NICE WORK! keep writing!


  • xforeverydeath
    October 20, 2003
    Edit | Reply
    it was not directed towards you. i'll never something like that towards you.


  • zaotik
    October 20, 2003
    Edit | Reply

    because

    A word on desiring the unobtainable. You know, of course, that you (or he) always wants what they can't have. It's the way things work. Find the flaws in what you have, and find the glory in the things you cannot. I for one, make my bed of unrest... by perpetuating the same process mentioned above.

    As for the poem: It speaks for itself. Loudly. -Adrian

  • xforeverydeath
    October 19, 2003
    Edit | Reply

    yo.

    Hmm. I like the message Kala. You write so, hardcore. haha.


    "together
    you set yourselves up for
    F A I L U R E
    she'll watch
    Y O U
    pass
    H E R
    by"

    i like.
    Edited on Oct 20, 9:33 because ''.