a numbing pain pierces my heart
and i slowly crumble, fall apart
with an undoubted certainty
you will never return to me
this isn't 'see you later' or 'catch you on the flip side'
goodbye means cry
the wave of feeling that washes over me
makes it so difficult to breathe
and i shake, and i fight
and i swear up and down i am alright
i turn away way to fast
so its hidden when you pass
this isnt a simple parting of ways
no this is seperation for eternitys days
i hide these flowing tears with my hood
if you saw them i know you would
turn around and come back to me
but then i know only one of us will be happy
and no matter what i do
i cant see the good in saying 'goodbye' to you
Author notes
Where's the good in goodbye? okay, sorry but i hate apostrophes!!!!
SouthernSecrets15
A contest entry
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525 points, ended November 23, 2007, 29 entries
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Comments
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Awe. So sad!
But i loved it.
I have so been down this road!
And i know what it's like to want someone to love you back. it's so hard to love someone and them not you.
This piece was great! I loved the part "i turn away way to fast
so its hidden when you pass"
I'm glad you sahred this and entered. Good luck in the contest!
-Mandi
*clappy
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wonderful the emotion is strong and the poem itself flows really well! The one line "this isnt a simple parting of ways
no this is seperation for eternitys days" It is very grabbing and as a preview worked very well. keep it up!
Goodluck!
~dawn♥
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Very good.
The poem was filled with emotion. It has a beautiful flow and a rhyme scheme is obvious. I enjoy your way of expressing such a feeling with so many metaphors. Great job!!
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