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My mouth remained

closed, although

puddles of my thoughts

ran freely inside my

head

 

I kissed boo-boo’s;

wiped tears away and

spoke soft words of

comfort behind the

echoes of my soul

 

the door was always open

but I remained locked

inside;

walking in shadows, falling

through cracks-

a grain of dust on the edge

of dreams

 

behind a cluster of expressions

you stole my blue eyes with

sick satisfaction;

selecting my darkness in

precise shades of gray

 

in the steel of my echo,

simple sentences are formed

as I taste delicious freedom

 

I pray for forgiveness as I

shed my skin crawl inside of you

looking through your cold eyes;

as the air hides the sky, I say;

“I’m not myself today, perhaps

I am you”

-anger always crashes loud

and band-aides hurt when

removed slowly

Author notes

Prompt: Whatever

eh....not my best but not bad considering my muse has been in the Bahamas for almost 2 weeks with little umbrella drinks.
Ungrateful bitch!...lol

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  • Metaphorist
    December 5, 2007

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    Can you read my thoughts? lol. I was working on something similar to this idea/metaphor a while back, but this is much better than something I could have written.

    Congrats on the trophy. It deserved it.

  • vertigo beat
    November 13, 2007

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    -I kissed boo-boo’s;
    wiped tears away
    and sometimes I wish someone else would do this dirty work.


    third stanza and the last two lines were my favorite.




  • Rowan gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    damn~ wish I hadn't put a word count on mine, this is excellent.

    Kathleen
    This is not whatever, this is great.