sometimes
I spin in circles
just to feel
myself move
centrifugal force
of emotion-
Author notes
Prompt: No bullshit.
A contest entry
- 14 words by lee-sharp.
14000 points, ended November 24, 2007, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Mania 3 by Celticmoon.
800 points, ended May 27, 2008, 49 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I like the concept of this piece, however I personally would hsve reworded this to exclude the use of 'I'. You already have 'myself' and that makes the reader know it is about you. No need to say the same more than once in such a short piece. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you.
Blessing
Bel
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Now the play of words really speak volumes within itself particularly the last set of lines..good luck
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Guilty
Very well thought out, I like it.
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We often force some emotions, don't we. Loved the depth of thought here and the ending is so very powerful. Great writing - you have me thinking now...
~ Nicolette
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<3 Love it
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lovely
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Like this short to the point poem. Easy to visualize and read and understand. Neat contest theme - good entry.
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perfect. sometimes i want to do the same thing.
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I like this. Short and complex.
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simply awesome.
loved it! great work!! best wishes in the contest
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the ending locks it. very nice.
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Me likie.
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yes. Perfect.
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Very creative my dear.
It always keeps me
on the outside
looking in
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