Does not know what lies ahead
But lays down all cold and dead
Trapped in life’s biggest ploy
Nothing more than gods little toy
Face set in an empty stare
Hair strewn about here and there
Who ever said life was fair
As it seems that no one cares
Who ever said life was fair
She was tossed here and there
Now she takes her final breath
And sets her face towards cold death
She lost lifes embrace
Now she lost to time and space.
Author notes
uhhhhhhh okay this is mi first rhyming poem im more of a free verse person. But please try to keep critisims to a minum. I hate writing poems that rhyming but i though id give it a try. So yeah uh read it.
Please tell me what you think
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Hey leigh that's amazing! For you're first rhyming poem I wouldn't be able to tell it was! So yeah good job!!!!!!
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wow!! so awesome, you took the subject and really ran with it. nice, love the description.
I agree, awesomeness!!
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awsomeness !!!!!!!!!!!!!
hahaha, i didnt evern realise it was ur first rhyming one !!!
really good !
cya
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I liked it, for a first. But the meter/rythm was a little off. Oh, btw, the weird German-like voice is gone now.
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this is very good, considering that it is your first rhyming poem, you should have entered my contest, but it's over now. you are actually not that bad at rhyming, you tolfd me you sucked! So not true. . . . . . . i mean your not a master yet, but you aren't terrible. *huggles*
ms. prep
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