Poetry in motion
and so the world turns
on one side bliss
as the other side burns.
Both sides desperately look
for their answer in God above
one proclaims their hatred
as the other embraces love.
A fist raised in anger
a finger pointing blame
the blissful won't acknowledge
too proud to admit their shame.
Beyond good and evil
our God up above
does not feel our hatred
nor embraces our love.
It's ultimately up to us
not from divinity above
we must embrace both,
the hatred and the love.
For somewhere in the middle
soon there must be found
a place of understanding,
a peaceful common ground.
If we cast away the ignorance
and strip away false pride
the world will surely blossom
and be nurtured by both sides.
If we can see past skin and bone
gender color and race
removing all the hatred could make
this world a better place.
Author notes
http://mallenroh001.deviantart.com/art/Human-Condition-Power-67567647
5. Peace on earth(between all species and all kinds)
In a list
A contest entry
- Fight the good fight by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended February 6, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - contest # 77, Dona Nobis Pacem by Elvenfairy.
450 points, ended September 3, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Think With Your Heart by Pisces rainbow.
1950 points, ended September 11, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Yin and Yang! Universal Spirituality by Dark Otter.
450 points, ended October 12, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very smooth reading poem of hope exposing the problem and the solution. Thanks for entering.
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Wow I am blown away by the similarities in this wonderful piece and the one it inspired me to write! This is truly awesome! Thanks for adding the links. This is flawless as far as I am concerned!
Blessings,
Frogz~
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A balance...and certainly you capture it, what the world needs now...Excellent write. Blessings.
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I love the depth and perception of this poem! It's so deserving of all the trophy's.
So peaceful and straight forward.
Thank you
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It is Easter Sunday as I type
and I realize any message of goodness and justice belongs to this day.
This poem is well-constructed and follows through.
It applies to individuals and to nations.
Importantly, you begin and end well.
Good luck and thank you for this entry, poet.
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Eloquent voice, powerful message
truly beautiful write poet with strong message that needs to be heard. Thanks for entering! -
Awesome! i love it! so great and i love how you incorporated God into it. only found one thing- to proud, to admit their shame.
should be "too proud" but other than that great write. thanks for entering -
"If we can see past skin and bone
gender color and race
removing all the hatred, could make
this world a better place."
I really like this stanza and believe it to be true, unfortunately I can't allow it in the contest. Sorry.
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"If we cast away the ignorance
and strip away the pride
the world will surely blossom
and be nurtured by both sides." - Great!
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Thank you for entering the "Human Rights - and Wrongs" competition. However, I do not understand your note. This competition does NOT have "options" - none of my competitions do!
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a great thought provoking piece
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An excellent piece!
I will give an insightful eval at judging time. Thanks for the entry.
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Really, men think too much. One chinese poet or philosopher or someone once said, "Man thinks and God laughs." If there is a God, it's really no surprise that he laughs at us thinking so seriously when really, in this universe, we are insignificant and infinitesimally small. So why get into all these arguements? Well, I'm getting off topic, so anyway... thanks for your entry! Shya
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BRAVO
my thoughts exactly
too much conflict in the world we don't try to find the beauty in the world, it is a sad truth.
it is the pride and ignorance(ego) that stands in our why
A perfect write for this contest just what I was hoping for.
thank you for your entry
God bless...
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The last 2 stanzas are very effective.The rhyming was done very well. I agree with ya, unless we're on the brink of dieing out, there will always be somebody wanting to screw stuff up haha. Great write, thanks for entering!
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Bravo. Excellent rhytum, and such a lifelike scene!
If we see past skin and bone
gender color and race
removing all the hatred could make
this world a better place.
Fantastic!!!!! Thank you for the entry.
Alex
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Congratulations on the gold you already won with this. I love the last 2 lines, indeed removing all the hatred would make this world a better place, but its such a huge task and no matter what, there will always be evil. Great message in this.
Best of luck to you in the contest you are in
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Preach it!!!!
Congrats on a well deserved award.
Peace, Rob
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Not bad ...
but you might want to fix the typo here:
To(o) proud to admit their shame
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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very nice
excellent write on the prompt . . like "A place of understanding" and "If we can see past skin and bone" . . good ending . . like your philosophy which shows through . . good luck in the contest . . !
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I really like the extent of exploration of this dichotomy. You have an idea that not only contends to each individual, but also to humanity as a whole. The form and rhythm carried it well. If I could suggest a change in title, only because it is already all over the poem and at threat of being overused. Overall a solid piece, well done.
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For somewhere in the middle,
Soon there must be found,
A place of understanding,
A peaceful common ground.
my favorite stanza of this write. its very well written, with a lot of thought and emotion in it.
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