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Hearts Cry

My heart crying
return to me.
This simple
love it's yours.

Tearfully, not yet.

A contest entry

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  • Seeking Peace silver member
    November 9, 2007

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    From the heart... nothing could be said or suggested to make something more beautiful than it already is...

    Karen

  • Liquid memories
    November 9, 2007

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    how sweet flowing few words that share deep thoughts of feelings. well done. success in the contest.
    You have done excellent with this.


  • TwilightDazzles
    November 9, 2007

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    This is beautiful, the ending line makes you stop and think and then go "wow" haha, if you know what I mean! I really enjoyed this one, in 14 words, you have said so much! Thanks for sharing this and I wish you the best in the contest


  • Southern Darling
    November 9, 2007

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    Your crying hearts made me cry. Simple words, but effective in the most wow sense of the word. This is another one that's lyrical - I can hear these words in a ballad. Low, long, and drawn out. I'd suggest you try singing it and see if you can't expand upon it into an actual song. I really savor these lines. Well done.