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Dare You

Dare you watch my every move, go ahead, I will destroy ugly your soul!

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  • Dmonik
    November 17, 2007

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    Bitter and Angry! I Love this piece. It reminds me of something similar I once wrote...
    Nicely done Sis


  • aeolia
    November 17, 2007
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    'Tis a bit messy in terms of organisation & presentation. Personally, I think it'd read better as such:

    "Dare you watch my every move?! Go ahead; I will destroy your ugly soul!"

    Don't know if you realised it, but you wrote "destroy ugly your soul" in the original.

    Good luck in the contest. I'm in the same one.

    --Cristina


  • Southern Darling
    November 9, 2007

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    Evil. In a good way. Bitter. Also in a good way. I found myself placing this in a guttural, but distinctly feminine tone of voice as I read it. I can just see the face of the one who speaks these words - glaring, fire burning in her irises from the intensity of her emotions. She's defiant - and damn if I don't find the purity of the sentiment appealing.


  • BeautifulFlame
    November 9, 2007
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    Well if thats how you feel then blast it to the world!
    Great job!