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On the slab, slightly warm, she lay
     in preparation for corrective procedures
          to be performed on body [spouse donated]
     with surgical steel instruments
as ice chests waited for donations.

     A cut down the abdomen, awakened
     senses and stirred the muse.

Limbs twitched, lifeless now lively
    
but doctor did not notice
          or pretended ignorance.

Anesthesia wore off while he continued
    
to open wide her chest cavity, collecting
    
what he needed to take out;
placed pieces of her 'past' on ice.

He hummed and stared into her windows
     with a grotesque grin underneath
          the surgeons mask.


Winked in support of slavery
under his command.


She could hear him speak of how and why
    
muffled between machine speech
         
of morbid suckling sounds.

Lights flickered before blackness blinded
   when both hazel gems were handed
            into hands of associate.

Stitches put on hold after heart disconnected
and wrapped carefully in sanitized cellophane.

Last minute, lips plant kiss
     on the cheek with chilled affections
          before steel doors are breached.

Rubber condolences cried into tissue
       
while his wife's body baked
rotisserie style within his brick furnace.









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  • DJWebb
    November 13, 2007

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    Stirring stuff that creates very vivid images. I was eating my lunch whilst reading it, which with hindsight, wasn't the best idea, l.o.l! Great write with a bone-chilling impact. Good luck in the contest.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    Oh heck everyone is right! This is very dark but such a strong write!Wonderfully penned indeed. It felf so vivid with your word choices.
    All the best in the contest
    Gaylene


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Wowsers this was a dark piece, I almost didn't want to read to see where this was going... well done on a brilliantly penned story hun

    Karen


  • HaleyMary
    November 9, 2007

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    Holy, this was a very dark write, seemed almost disturbing in a way. As I was reading this, I was imagining a person about to experience their own cremation. Creepy. Good luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    November 9, 2007

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    Holy Smokes, this is dark, but yet wonderfully done! What a great job you have done on this one! I am not sure if I can recall such a dark from you before, but this is great!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nettie


  • penman gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Whew!

    Wow, what a dark and powerful tale you have woven. The images are incredible. The story so intense. Many blessing in the contest sweetness.

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