i used to howl
at the fall of night
the sinking harvest moon
it was only because
you had a curfew
and i
too many
hours to share
i once coiled up
hissed at the
looks you gave other
men
a venomous spirit
and an agile sense
of self
your experience
was lovely
and my innocence
had always been
yours
i tore the flesh
from you
with a carnivorous eye
and a lovers
nimble fingers
you were wise
and i sought refuge
under your owl-ish wings
you held me
and taught me
like a mother
but you touched me
as if we
were dancing
in a dream
fumbling through realities
tripping over
the varied levels
of a bricked pathway
man is animal enough
with instinct all his own
and love to
last the night
Author notes
lee-sharp
A contest entry
- INVITE ONLY: 20 awesome poets! by DrunktankLullaby.
1000 points, ended November 23, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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delicious...in a rather wicked sort of way....don't ask me why, this is just what my gut felt after reading your poem. I like it. Obviously, so did the host
Love, Lane
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I can see why this won the gold. What an amazing use of imagery and metaphor. Love the Biblical allusion as well.
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A wonderful written account of animalistic tendencies that we all have, IF we would admit to it. I really like the emotion and imagery within this stanza, it is so full of how we feel at times.
i tore the flesh
from you
with a carnivorous eye
and a lovers
nimble fingers
Well done!
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your experience
was lovely
and my innocence
had always been
yours---- get rid of the gap here and the "dots"[not your thing].
i liked where you took it. fantastic.
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your experience
was lovely
and my innocence
had always been
yours---- get rid of the gap here and the "dots"[not your thing].
i liked where you took it. fantastic.
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eh... i guess youre right.
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I like the idea, too. Let me know if you write this!
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i wrote it. now let me know how to make it less sucky. hahaha. it needs some help.
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