A red river ran along jagged stones cobbled,
too small to wade in, too small to care
Like a tainted red ribbon, once adorning a gift,
spilled against society, strewn into the air
Along shores, recessed nooks of dark abode,
befitting pigeon's talon... no doves found
Beguiled lost souls, propped paper against storm,
crumpled newspaper in heap for pillow on the ground
Light giving warmth of sun cursed need and want,
parching lip that yearned for mead and ale
Moon's once thought glow of serenity disdained,
for this river's soul... flows from hell
Step over my running veins,
Quench not thy thirst here
Plague be my flow and name
Dare you not... stop here
Disturb not my rivers flow
No life thrives in my stream
I am not a river to know
My shores aren't as they seem
Winds whisper around my demise, refusing me breath,
as the only color that I see, runs jagged red
My pain no longer cries out, only numbness left
To some, I am living, but to me... I am dead
Author notes
Prompt: Picture Inspired
~By garret~
A contest entry
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I know this poem is great to read, I especially liked:
''Step over my running veins,
Quench not thy thirst here
Plague be my flow and name
Dare you not... stop here''
So much thought gone into such little parts. I would not change much about this poem because it links directly to the picture! The first line immediately forces you to read on!
Well done, thank you and good luck
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Hah. I think many people can relate to this, how to people they are alive yet they feel quite dead inside and faking a huge smile. This was good. Thanks for entering.
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I love this, beautifully sad and captivates every bit of the prompt well. I like the phrasing and words chosen. I really enjoyed this take on the prompt.
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Wow. This is a really sad tale of society and how numb it can be about other's people's pain. Really should be a wake up call for others but it's hard to get anyone to listen to you, isn't it? My favorite part of this is the condensed part that is center kind of by itself. It really is beautiful to read. You did a good job here.
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So much amazing depth you have created here. Excellent take on the prompt! Such a fragrant piece of sadness, and paled perception of hope carved within. For there is so much that goes unnoticed, right before our very eyes. Great write!
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