Gathering good, the grains of sand;
saving sellers settle their lore;
Mutanabi, a thousand years stand
and Shahrazad shall sing once more.
Teetering precipice of fears ~
as brave diligence wins the door,
blood and sweat of regretful tears
and Shahrazad shall sing once more.
Heritage in pages running,
these beautiful books to endure;
inshallah, good things are coming
and Shahrazad shall sing once more.
Gathering good, the grains of sand
and Shahrazad shall sing once more.
Author notes
In-shal-lah: God willing.
Mu-tana-bi: an historic book sellers market in Baghdad.
This is a good video; a bright spot in a media filled with darkness.
Sources:
http://video.on.nytimes.com/?fr_story=a45be4e8e2ab7e44211a7f987d6b2380d8c2a021
Kyrielle Sonnet
A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet).
Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a
refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet
consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning
of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending
couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:
AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Challenge Round 3 - INVITE ONLY by Laura Lamarca.
850 points, ended November 17, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice poem. I like the repetition of "Shahrazad shall sing once more". Thanks for entering this!
Blessings,
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Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
Ken, This is amazing.
To see you writing form poetry was different to me and then to see it this beautiful was not surprising at all. You are a master of imagery and flow which would serve well in this form. It was so nice to see that ray of hope and sunshine coming through when all we hear these days in the news is tragedy after tragedy. You were up against some very stiff competition here and I congratulate you on the bronze. More so I say kudos for a brilliant write that left me in AWE. Thank you for sharing the gift of your illustrious pen with all of us. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce 
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Joyce, thank you kindly,
I wanted to do just that bring "a ray of hope and sunshine" to this dreary contest of hard subjects.
I like form but refuse to sacrifice content to achieve its perfection and so I find it hard to use.
thank you for reading
Ken
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This is a very good poem in both content and form All I can say is bravo!
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The style, form, rhyme, wording...all flawless. It sings as a song full of hope for a better day, and that is what poetry should be. The video clip link added sheds a wonderful light on the write, but it stands alone, with or without it, as a fantastic lyrical beacon. You have managed to amaze me thrice now. I believe I have found a new favorite.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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Score : 95%
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Rubric Grade A+ (99%)
Initial Impact/Reaction 10/10
Originality of content 10/10
Quality of Form/Rhyme 10/10
Overall Flow/Syllables 10/10
Ideas/Metaphors/Imagery 10/10
Poetic Device/Verbiage 10/10
Cohesion 10/10
Understandable/Makes sense 10/10
Overall poetic effort 4/5
Emotion/Personality/Edge 5/5
Last impact/reaction 10/10
Well done!
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awesome,
SEE! free versers can do form.
although, in all fairness, I had an easy form. -
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This is actually quite the intricate form and one that many struggle with. I tried so hard to match the forms to the ability of each poet...so nice to see I got it right in this instance
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pamela, also said it was a difficault form; sadly, I found finding positive news in the media far more daunting.
but I did enjoy this round greatly and am pleased with the finished work.
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Wow~! I don't think I can offer much to this exquisite piece. You have used the form extremely well and the flow is stunning. Beautiful piece.
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thank you, I struggled hard to find a topic that fit the form and meafter that the words just spilled on the page like free verse.
thanks for the comment.
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Oh YES!!!
Intial score : 9.5 -
amazing
your flow just rocks..you have mastered this style..this is an amazing write..good luck in the contest..
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Oh my
Wow. You have spun pure magic in this Kyrielle. One of my favorite forms as you know and YOU - a free-verser? OH you have done this form proud. Your anchor line is strong and tight. Just superb! Well done sweetie. Very very well done. BRAVO!! Man, I'd better get cracking! I have my work cut out for me. So good! ~Pamela
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mmmm I loved this Wonderful, wonderful work....
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This is a graceful, lyrical poem with a powerful message. I am reminded of the iron fist in a velvet glove. I loved your refrain, and I also love to read a poem that teaches me something new. You are a welcome addition to this contest, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Good luck and peace, Liz
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Initial reaction: 10
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sick I love the morphin pic shame the girl resembles a fiend of mine but you're way cooler by far
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thanks
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