life stood still, breathing
as our eyes locked again
igniting flickers of renewed hope
in two souls that ran out of faith.
as passions collide heart to heart
and joy flits between our smiles,
we dance to our heartbeats
and collapse in love’s tunes.
A contest entry
- Master the short poem by Turtledove.
475 points, ended November 9, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I still love the sweet poetic nature of this one xx
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WOW! this was like magic! the words u used brought back my smile! Great work! So short! yet... i feel like giving you a gazillion applauds!
This was simple an amazing piece charu... wonderful! I liked the second stanza the most! it was just so beautifully penned!
DUDE!!! i can't say anything more!!! other than the fact that this piece rocked the hell out! IT WAS AWESOME! and best of luck!!! so hope u win something huge!!! maybe a gold!!! AHH! good luck! and keep writing aight? luv u!
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Keep the faith baby!
Always wanted to say that. Like the second stanza after I reread it. Nice poem altogether. I love the closing two lines. I guess I liked the entire poem after all. Good work and good luck. -
oooh... brilliant. You're too good, beauty. *cheers enthusiasticall* you ccertainly DID master the short poem, of which you are already master! A swooping love scene that carried me right off... u rock
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