crystal teardrops cascade
as a silver fugue
of
blushing ivory slippers
sashay
as a sea of
blissful milky blue
harp strings strung
cranberry chimes
dancing together
longing for cherry violins
to melt
into
stepping pianos
that now recede
echoing
the roll of the drum
quickening
blushing ivory
slippers
screaming scarlet streams
of a tattered
chartreuse horn
pulsate
as the fugue
of harmonious elegance
sashays
blushing ivory slippers
leance
10-18-2003
Author notes
Published in Skyline Magazine. January/February 2004 Holiday Issue.
This was written for my daughter....Corinne.
This is love!
Written October 18th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest 15 by crivanea.
600 points, ended January 3, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Be My Muse by Artemis Gem.
1298 points, ended May 23, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Colour of the Wind by SeaWithYourHeart.
600 points, ended July 31, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Feel it Without Saying It by Rhiannan.
700 points, ended July 10, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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amazing imagery and language. just amazing is all i can say about this poem.
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I already told you this poem rock..what more will you like me to say? ^_^ lovely write and I'm glad I get to read it again
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A beautifully penned piece. The imagery is so rich and lovely it just really took my breath away....BRAVA!!!
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Beautiful imagery and wonderful use of allusions. This poem has the essence of love without saying it which exactly what this prompt is about. Great job, thank you for entering!
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this is so pretty! i dont play anything but it kinda makes me want to be able to make music. such beautiful imagery
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Oh my god!
this is fantastic music to my ears.
I play most of these instruments and I love the concept of nature and music together.
i love your alliteration and the format the way you have broken up the descriptions of the instruments is simply amazing
wow
I love the words so rich and musical. love every word.
"crystal teardrops cascade
as a silver fugue
of
blushing ivory slippers
sashay
as a sea of
blissful milky blue
harp strings strung
cranberry chimes
dancing together
longing for cherry violins
to melt
into
stepping pianos
that now recede
echoing"
This first string of descriptions really grabbed me. the colours the sounds the descriptions carefully chosen to produce this symphony of nature!
love it Favorites straight away!
well done and good luck in my contest: -
Wow
The most amazing imagery, feel, vocabulary, and just poem in general I have read all week!! My favorite part was:
into
stepping pianos
that now recede
echoing
the roll of the drum
quickening
blushing ivory
slippers
screaming scarlet streams
of a tattered
chartreuse horn
pulsate
as the fugue
of harmonious elegance
sashays
blushing ivory slippers
There was such and amazing feel in those stanzas. Great job and best of luck in your writing future.
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I like the comparisons/description
blushing ivory slippers
cranberry chimes
dancing together
longing for cherry violins
to melt
nicely done! keep it up!
pegleg
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this poem is beautiful..although..i have no idea how it relate to the theme..perhaps that is because i don't understand half of this poem..lol..wonderful vocab u have..
to the piece..i strive to write like u..to me..this is my fav. way of writing..the form..the lines..the style..wonderful job as always -
I really like it. I love music. it seems to just flow and make you hear the symphony in the back of your head. I love it good luck -rainy
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Beautiful!
A piece from your heart that paints with perfect imagery,
from start to finish, a beautifully inscribed write my friend!
Thanks for sharing you,
and congrates with it being published!
Much love to you and yours!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver~
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I like it , I like it, I like it, I really like it!...tender and sweet...lovely write...thanks for sharing.
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I like it , I like it, I like it, I really like it!...tender and sweet...lovely write...thanks for sharing.
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This piece is wonderful. Not only do you have all of the musical images, you also use color wonderfully. I loved the dynamic between the two. Best of luck in the contest, this is a great piece. --->pixxie<---
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This poem is off it's head; i loved the beautiful series of images it prevoked.
Thank you
Timmy S Edgar © 2006 -
Very good
Well written. Although as a male I might have less appreciation of it than someone of the "fairer sex". -
truly poetic.... and i love how creative you are in this.. i like the rose background too.. nice write.. =]
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Well, I don't think there is anything left to say for this amazing piece! It is fantastic. I love it! Keep that pen flowing.
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I love how this poem flows, smooth and richly written. I give you my praise and wish you much luck in the contest. As with all poets, writing poetry is something that just happens, and I am glad that this poem came into existance.
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This is beautiful. It's very beautiful in the way it flows through, the way the words flow into the part they're in, or how they transition beautifully into the next.
Great job!
Thanks so much for entering!!
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I've read it twice so far. The first time, I was stricken by the music-related imagery, especially as related to musical instruments (ivory corresponding to the keys of a piano, etc.). The second time, I caught much more. It is such a deep and cohesive piece; I truly love it. I will have to read it a few more times, as I am eager to grasp more of it.
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At first the descriptions seem to be dangerously close to overstepping the line between "just enough" and "too much", but you keep it where it should be. With "cherry violins" and "stepping pianos", I think I want to melt into this poem. Lovely
And good luck in the contest
-mercé -
excellent
Nicely written!!!
Much thought must have went into this poem. Extremely well versed. Impressive!!!
Good luck in the contest -
This took my breath away. By the time I came to the end I had had a front row orchestra seat at YOUR beautiful performance
I am speechless........
Best wishes in this contest sweetie
xoxoxo
Reenie
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wow...i was drawn to this by the "silver" in the title (i am after all hartofSILVER
) and wow...this is amazing 
it was so fast paced I loved it...and might I add that I love the mention of violins and pianos...(the guy i like plays violin, remember from my contest poem ) I really liked this, and I wish you luck in the challenge...if it hasn't been judged yet...lol
take care
kayla* -
Hmm i remember commenting on this poem...oh well this is great and i think u express your self in a pretty and strange way
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Awesome!
blushing ivory slippers
sashaying as a sea of
blissful milky blue
harp strings strung
^^ my favorite stanza ^^
Awesome poem!!!
Different set up, I like it!
Hugs from Oklahoma!
Love Aimee -
a lot of emotion was put into this piece, I liked it too.
I think it stands out as more of a sound than words, because of the way you write about the sound of drums, great detail. I'm impressed, not well to find poems like this...
great write all in all, I give it a good 8 and a half points out of 10... being 10 the best, but nobody's perfect. -
The more people say scarlet the better...
I could almost taste this imagery...Just wow! You're one amazing poet! Keep it up...
!~YS4e~!
Scarlett -
beautiful! this is an entrancing write...it's so smooth and flowing...good luck in the contest!
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this was sweet.. and such a soft and peaceful tone.
Yvonne
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I have to say this background really really compliments the poem's imagery, and I like the image of the slippers..very delicate, yet somehow haunting Nicely done.
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This was tasteful, beautiful and extremely tangible for me . . . I could feel and touch your colourful instruments and songs in this silver fugue, which by the way, is an amazing title. What a great poem this was . . . I could almost hear it set to music. I hope you win/won this contest, because this was by far the best one I've read in the contest lineup. Great, great work here - a masterpiece. Thanks.
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I perrfomed to a song once, it was called, Rich Man's Fugue, and it was fun. Your poem sounds like it could be lyrics as well.
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Absolutely Incredible!!!!!!!
Sunshine
This is soooooooooooamazing, the gorgeous images flowing in between your lovely words , the background is divine
Karen
p.s. good luck in the contest
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this just echoes in wonderment. the color, the tone of voice, the scheme of how it moves from one stanza to the next. wonderful works maistro
WSD -
Oh my gosh!!...thi
s poem is simply stunning...t his will definately make me want to go and read other poetry by you...great piece of work!!!...le anne xxx -
oh wow. This is so beautiful. you certainly have a way with words. thank you for entering my contest! This is just lovely
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Five Star***** Triple A+++ plus
Fugue...Sashaying
This is a very sensual poem with excellent imagery and metaphor. The kind of writing of great poets and very well done. EXCELLENT
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Beautifully Written
What a beautiful written piece, the imagery here in this rocks!
I just always enjoy when I get a chance to read you! ~Smiles~
Thanks for sharing, another poem by you I enjoyed very much!
This was one of my favs by you! Great write, a really great write!
Keep up the great works, you are getting better each time I read ya!
Read ya later! ~Smiles~
-Timothy -
Bloody awesome imagery! You seem to have gotten this comment alot... but it's true. Very striking, clear, resonating pictures... soft and harsh. Lovely word choice, not too sure what it's about, but the mood created makes up for that
... by the way, an interesting background.
Deepest Regards,
Boris The Russian -
wonderful. i see the psychadelic symphony of life. just a perfect job.
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Lisa , great fusion of words . backgrounds and imagery In my eyes this is a winner hands up. Best of luck to you
mou@@@@@@@@@@z
Reenie
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wow... nice job.
i think you might win this. it was very beautiful.
the imagery was amazing and your word choice was excellent
you had my attention with the very first word. wonderful job.
good luck.
-paige- -
You had me hooked from the first line
crystal teardrops
cascade as a
silver fugue
and each word that follows is equally beautiful. you have well captured emotions in sound and colour a poem that can be felt by the senses powerfully. Great going.
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Wow. The imagery in ths poem is awesome, i love it. It brings you into this crazy picture... which is really neat. Great job on this one, do good in the contest. Goodbye.
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Excellent !!!!!!!!!!
Oh wow ! This poem is BEAUTIFUL !
I chose two different lines that swept me away ..
1- cranberry chimes
dancing together
longing for cherry violins
to melt
2- screaming scarlet streams
of a tattered
chartreuse horn
pulsating
Like I've told everyone :
This contest will be hard for
me to judge ... EXCELLENT !!
Thank You for your entry!
Yertweetyness
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That's amazing - an unusual but absorbing mix of imagery.
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Aww this is so beautiful! and denfinatly the best love poem ive read
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wonderful imagery...i loved how you connected sound and taste together. it's a rarely seen combination-
i think you worded it well. "blushing ivory slippers" and the sounds in your poem made me think of old-fashione d ballroom dancing, like something out of gone with the wind.
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