Forward falling,
Ever downward,
How far can this really go?
It’s out of my hands,
My grip's slipped away,
And there’s nothing I can show,
To prove that I control my life,
There’s nothing left for me to say,
As downward, downward,
A constant freefall,
My heart is still yours to break.
Author notes
yeahhhhhh, welll....for lynn's contest. this is a subject i know allllllllllll too well at the moment.
A contest entry
- Inevitable Downfall by Ransomed-n-Redeemed.
350 points, ended December 12, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Out of all the things that really stand out of the poem, it has to be the amazing ending. I would try taking out some of the commas though to make if flow better.
Thanks for entering, mi amiga.
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