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Sandcastles

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We often speak in romance
of characters from fantasies
We speak of Princes and Princesses
and of noble Kings and Queens.
We speak of our Prince Charmings
and of our Angels in the skies,
for all of us dream to be one of these things
in someone else's eyes.
And such are the dreams of this man,
to some woman, her Prince Charming be,
to be the Prince of her dreams to the Princess
the Prince to the Princess in thee.
And I've had these dreams of you my Dear.
Will this frog your Prince Pharming be?
And will you be the Princess to this man....
of these dreams will we finally be free?
If I could I would build you a castle
that's the greatest in all the land.
It's spires would tickle the starry skies,
and we walk there together hand in hand.
I'd surround it with moat and drawbridge
to protect my princess from harm...
with a fireplace built into every room
to keep my beautiful Princess warm.
And I'd have for us the most majestic of steeds
so that we could ride like the wind on his feet,
and you'd see that this kinght in his armour
is the most princely that you'll ever meet.
And I'd slay all the fiery dragons
that would dare to inhabit our land...,
on majestic steed,  I'd seek them out
with Excalibur in my hand.
Yes, I'd fight to the death all these dragons
that might ever have threatened thee,
so that you'd see me as your protector...,
so that you'd see the courage in me.
But, alas, I will build you no castles
that's the greatest in all the land,
for the only castles we would ever build
are the ones that we'd build out of sand.
Nor will there be the knight in his armor
nor the majestic steed he would ride...
no realms of ours to to ride like the wind
with you there by my side.
And there are no fiery dragons,
to slay for my princess's sake,
for the only dragons we'll ever face
are the dragonflies by the lake.
But what makes a man princely stature?
Is it the having and giving these things?
Or is it that he would if could for the princess in you
and the knowledge and feeling that brings.
For the simplest of little cabins,
could be a castle to lovers, you see...
it's not the house you live in that makes it so
but who lives there and loves there with thee.
And the simplest of vehicles the majestic steed
to travel side by side ore the land...
with the person you live and love with,
with the one you've given your hand.
And though there are no fiery dragons,
the uncertainty of what lies ahead,
will be the dragons that you'll face  together
with Excalibur of love in your hands.
Yes, we often speak in romance
of characters from fantasies.
We speak of Princes and Princesses
and of noble Kings and Queens.
We speak of our Prince Charmings
and of our Angels in the skies
for all of us dream to be one of these things
in someone else's eyes.
And such are the dreams of this man
to some woman her Prince Charming be,
and I find myself hoping the Princess in you
will discover  the Prince within me.

Ribbit

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  • raggyann
    December 27, 2007

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    you are so wise and so romantic
    your a wonderful poet
    i love reading you
    you light up my life with your words
    thank you


  • Frodofan silver member
    December 1, 2007

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    Ha! I love the "ribbit" at the end. This was very nice. Form-wise it could use some help with the flow here and there. I'd love to see the entire thing put into meter, but concept-wise it's great. Maybe slightly long, but not so that it really bored me.

    I liked the description of the castle tickling the skies and I loved the way you came back to present day with the sandcastles, how a cabin can be a castle, etc.. It really was charming.

    Thanks for entering.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 18, 2007

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    Awww!!! Absolutely Brilliant!! this is really great I love the flow and if I wasn't married You could be my Prince. This is Really Great. i love fairy tales too.


    • The Madman silver member
      November 18, 2007
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      Awww!!! Absolutely Brilliant

      Awe..you are too kind...sort of a fairy tail here that got a bit long, but fit the situation at the time. Both a statement of hopes and dreams of love as well as what exactly is important in ones life, the "treasures" we have with earthly possessions, or the treasure of love itself without the materialistic trappings so many value more than love itself..

      Thx for visiting,

      Evan


      Ribbit