Sometimes I wish I was dust
under the feet of an Angel
feeling His love from above
hearing a beautiful voice
Sometimes I wish I was dust
under the feet of the Devil
feeling an Angels warm touch
singing a wonderful song
Sometimes I wish I could fly
meeting an Angel and Him
feeling their endless love
touching my soul from above
Sometimes I wish I could live
praying to Him all in peace
feeling a warm breath of air
touching a world like a dream
What did you think
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Hmm, interesting take.
I'm pretty sure you've written this with a Christian mindset. Here's the funny thing though. I'm an atheist, and reading it from an atheist point of view it comes across as an ironic poem.
I find it quite interesting that the same poem, read from 2 different stand points, still works.
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A sort of strange list of wishes. I was confused by the feeling of dist under the feet of the devil. I rather thought that would be a less enjoyable experience. You have some nice imagery and it sounds very heart-felt but at the same time it makes me wish that more people wished for the things that could make our world a better place. Instead a heard of people, silently drifting throught life waiting for their reward why don't we wish for peace and happiness on earth? Religion confuses me...
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Just a beautiful and heartwarming poem touching and revealing the voice of the soul so effectively. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
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This poem has promise and echoes softness as most dreams [of this nature do]. There is nothing to wish or dream and what's more, the focus of the wish / dream is beautiful. Take care. Frans
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little dumplings everywhere lifes no fun without a good fight, But let me ask you something if you could be god's greatest advesary or nothing which would you be i would wipe my ass with the mona lisa if it meant god would know my name, know my deeds, know the very nature of my soul .... Go burn down a museum =)
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great write
great imagery
though I always wante to be the pin lots of angels dance on. anything to be hidden. and the image of crowds of angels perks me up also.
sorry I dragged your stuff to other places
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Nice job, the imagery was good, however to be critical, I didnt really like the feel of 2 repeated images, (the dust) then two different images (flying and living). I just seemed awkward to me, :S.
I really did like the rest of the piece however; you really made the words make sense, which is easier said than done!
Bravo!
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Very interesting write, Strong piece, and very beautiful
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This is such a lovely and uplifting poem. I love the imagery here and I seemed to float as I was reading this poem. Well done.
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Beautifull write, it's speaks of a longing for spirituality and closeness with the lord, I especially like the first and second stanza, this was well written and I really enjoyed it.
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Sometimes I wish I could live
praying to Him all in peace
feeling a warm breath of air
touching a world like a dream
Indeed a heartfelt write...a sacred journey you took to all of us..a beauty of the peace of soul is here..amen..it is great prayer of the light..you did it with great words ..I love the message of this amazing write..a beauty of life you touched here my
friend bringing a kind of the scenario of the universal truth in your so powerful poetic words..well done..
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