For years I was there
I listened, I gave
It never seems fair
To lose the love you crave.
For you walked away
After I gave you my heart
I begged you to stay
Though I know it wasn't smart.
Probably the stupidest thing
That I could have done
'Cuz Like a bee who can sting
Me, you stung.
When I found out you cheated
My broken heart did shatter
For four years I was mistreated
At the time it didn't seem to matter.
I let you control me
And tell me what to do
I couldn't forsee
The Hell you'd put me through.
I gave you attention
I gave you my all
Thought you were the one
Why did you put up a wall?
I'd ask what was wrong
And you would evade
You strung me along
A fool of me you made.
I hope to forget you
And move on with my life
I pray that it's true
I was never meant to be your wife.
A new relationship you've begun
Go on, forget me, that's fine
Because one day there will be a man
Who I will proudly call mine.
He'll treat me sweetly
And give up his chair
Love me completely
And play with my hair.
I know you don't care
What I have to say
But please beware
Of karma someday.
I wish you the best
Truly I do
May you be happy and blessed
Until I've forgotten, Adieu.
Author notes
Entry 2
(This is about a guy I dated for 4 years...)
A contest entry
- A love that was never real but the pain after was by MysteriousMoonlight.
875 points, ended December 29, 2007, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love in the Shadows by Wild-N-Wiccan.
530 points, ended February 14, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - feeling lost i want sappy stuff people by Pureisolation.
450 points, ended February 15, 2008, 45 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Feel free to let me know what you think!
Comments
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What a wonderfully sad and emotional poem this was.
Bell, xx
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this is awesome thanx for entering
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This actually reminds me of an ex girlfriend I use to have.... very powerful writing and very deep emotion... Awesome job! Good luck in the contest!
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Strong in emotion and very passionate.. I commend you for that. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Very nicely done. Best of luck.
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very nice poem.
loved the background,
it went with the poem.
thanks for entering.
best of luck.
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Very well written, I enjoyed the change of tune as it went on there towards the end, more hope than dispair. I am glad everything's good now! Thanks for entering my humble little contest!
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aww wow loely flow on this, and so powerful and emotional, great job!
congrats on all those trophies, and good luck in the next contets =) -
Wow such emotion i can tell u were going through a hard time. My favorite part was:
Probably the stupidest thing
That I could have done
'Cuz Like a bee who can sting
Me, you stung.
Good luck in the contest.
De-Throne -
Wow! I love it! I can of course relate. This was very emotional, and very well written. Awesome.
And yes, you WILL find that special someone --never give up :-]
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wow...i mean wow...i love this poem. I love love love it. I can relate to it so much. it is written so beautifly and flows so well...I love the deep emotion the poem has and it is in every sentence. thank you for entering my contest.
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this was very emotional.great write. I am glad you have found somebody who is treating you better.thank you forentering and good luck!
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awww :'( I like this.
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still love this poem!good luck!
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Removing to close this contest. please enter in other contest
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I'm sorry but could you please re enter this poem in a new contest i am holding because of some error made this contest will be shut down a new one will be started same type so don't change the poem please!
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WOW!!!
This is one of the best poems I have read in a long time. It holds you close. makes you want to cry. I am sorry cause of what this poem represents is sad. It is sad cause it happens to good people all the time. Truly a great poet...
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I would never wish the best upon a guy who has cheated on the one who was crazy in love with him. can you see how very wrong that is? Do you think that he cared abuot how you would feel or even considered you whilst he was cheating on you? I don't think so. Nice poem though.
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Awesome poem
I loved it . I could feel the anger and hurt. great poem good luck in the contest -
Nice rhyme, and your poem tells the story well. It's sad when someone gives so much of themselves in a relationship, only for it to be unappreciated or betrayed.
This is a fairly long poem, but it reads fast and kept my attention all the way. I was hoping for a happy ending, and there is a slightly hopeful note at the end, showing me an inner strength that will hopefully help you through this.
Thank you so much for your entry, and good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
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being a woman , i loved it.. sometimes though u know the person is wrong for u , u try 2 hold on.. very well written indeed
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this i love it had very close everything i was looking for.Good Luck
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finalist,
I really liked this,
I liked the rhyme, i thnk it worked [=
great piece [=
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