Peace promising bells
Snow covering blood and tears
Caskets coming home
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I think this is beautifully done. It has a simple style and yet you can feel so much from it. The ending is perfect, it aches. Lovely job. Thank you for sharing this with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
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Nice powerful poem. Short and yet full of imagery and dark meaning. good write.
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so, what i am getting from this is that if you desire peace you must have some who are willing to pay the price and that only after we have lost can we know peace... right?
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Beautiful, Very well worded and strong write. so much meaning within so little words, well done.. bravo
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It's simple, dark, and powerful. I'm always impressed by how much someone can express in a Haiku, because Haiku's are just so short. But it all just came together after I finished reading it. I wasn't even expecting line 2, and line 3 hit me out of nowehere, but it was like a puzzle being put together. By the end, I just was...yeah wow.
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I like this a lot. It says so much in so few words. I too love the form of this writing, simply because the writer is forced to be creative with what he or she can come up with, AS WELL as tell a story. Wonderful writing here that was visually very strong indeed. Keep writing. This was good.
All the best
Wayne Leon
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I liked it,although I feel that less common words could of set this poem off amazingly.
Although this is good,try using other words then blood and tears.Just a suggestion.
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wonderful hiku, they are so hard to write, to protray your message in such a short and restriced way is sooooooooooooooooooooooooo hard. but this peice is great! i absolutly love it! wonderful write
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excellent write, I enjoy these poems cause a little says so much, if I could suggest one thing it'd be that a haiku usually pertains to nature so technically what you have here is a senyru, the only reason I know this is because someone pointed it out to me on a poem that I wrote, but none the less it is a great write and I truely enjoyed the read.
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Holy Night
Peace promising bells
Snow covering blood and tears
Caskets coming home
Three little lines can say so much, and this poem proves that sometimes, less is more. There are so many things that this could mean, Christmas, covering sadness? Your work really make me think, and I love that
keep it up
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This is the very reason i do not write haiku's.
I could never compete with the perfection that this is.
the images are fearsome and upsetting they are so powerful.
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