You chose your road,
That paved path to sweet success,
I chose mine,
That downtrodden trail through aging addiction,
Before we crossed the highway
Before we watched some friends die
Underneath the wheels of a city,
Before we needed money
Before we needed to lie
We were the only ones
Refusing to run,
Now we're over it,
We have given in,
We have given this,
Our last attempt,
So I'll see you somewhere
In the arms of despair
Underneath the wheels of this city
A contest entry
- November New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended December 7, 2007, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering
When we give up what we believe in because we just don't have the fight in us anymore... is the day that all is lost.
Thank you for entering and good luck
Faerie
Site Greeter -
Thanks for entering and welcome to allpoetry
It is a sad day when we give up on our convictions and just try to get along. Nice flow and structure.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
Site Greeter
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Thanks for entering
Seem a rather intense choice has been made here and from the imagery you paint a dark picture. Let us hope there is hope at the end of this despair.
Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Thank you for your entry
G'Day Adam-J
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Very sad write you have penned about choices; alas some of us make the choice to be addicted to different things and go through life completely different to others. Though that is what makes a person a person.
Allowing themselves to do things differently but it only works when the choice is bad if the person allows themselves to recognise that and move on to better things.
I love the strong ending.
Best of luck in the contest
Welcome to AllPoetry
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Wow... this was like... so deep and stuff. I could actually imagine this as someone's life and what they're experiencing. Way awesome.
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Welcome to All Poetry
Oh this sounds so sad. I feel you have regretted many choices you have made in your life, as we all do.
A very emotional piece.
Thanks so much for entering our contest
Gaylene
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