No time...
We lay in the night,
And talk in daylight.
You say you love me,
But the time is not right.
To much going on in your life.
Time you can't give me,
But you say that you miss me.
You call me beautiful,
You call me sexy,
You call me hun.
So what should I think?
The love that we feel,
Has become extinct?
You say there's no one else,
But still the time you can not give.
So please forgive,
when I say;
I know that you love me,
But time won't stand still.
So the time is now,
For you to fullfill.
Rachel A. Picard
11/8/2007
Author notes
I long...
A contest entry
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this is a really good poem!I love the fifth stanza.THe choice of words was fabulous
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this poem is exactly what i'm talking about great job and good luck
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I'm sorry but could you please re enter this poem in a new contest i am holding because of some error made this contest will be shut down a new one will be started same type so don't change the poem please!
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Thanks for your entry! Good luck.
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This poem had good flow but after a while it just sort of lost our attention. We just really didn't feel the anger so much of it. Still a good write.
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I liked this poem. I liked how it was said, I liked how you expressed your sadness whether your decision be to stay with the person who decided that they loved you without any time or to leave them.
So what should I think?
The love that we feel,
Has become exstinct?
Though extinct is spelled wrong, I think that pointing out the confusion in a situation like this is necessary. You don't know if they really love you or not. Maybe they do, maybe not.
In this world, there are too many possibilities.
Good write.
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Full of emotion and still has a littel confusion!it's a nice write
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There is a crack dat sailor moon? This fad is going to far. -.-;;
Anyways. I really enjoyed reading this. good luck in the contest.
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Very good write full of emotion write some more so i can read them!!! lol
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WELL DONE! Beautiful display of emotions, they jump right from the page!
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mmm
I imagined this almost as a song... a song without an ending
this piece is very strong and I enjoyed the flow of things here- the rhyme was very put together and sortof rang around in my head for a while... well done! -
the last stanza really hits the message through i think that is where this poem really shines those lines are powerful and packed with emotion
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Good one
This is absolutely gorgeous, your imagery is stunning
One can't help but feel this imagery it Rocks !!!
a pleasure to read Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write. > Love these lines >>>
But time won't stand still.
So the time is now,
For you to fullfill.
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Welcome To AllPoetry
This is a very moving and emotional write. You express your feelings well. The only thing I can suggest is using spell check. Other than that, a beautiful heartfelt write! AP is pleased that you are here and we all hope you enjoy the site.
Jeannie
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