Brushed up against a memory,
wind I felt yet did not see.
Thoughts of you flooding my mind,
so tightly held they now unwind.
Upside down twist the hourglass,
once again let memories pass.
Each grain of sand a speck in time,
together grandiose sublime.
Turned the corner on past the why?
remembrances still make me cry.
In my chest I still feel you near,
with every heartbeat you are here.
Creep into my mind and caress,
my disguised pain and loneliness.
Empty place once shared with glee,
my first born son not here with me.
Heavenly traveler that you be,
now living life eternally.
You are in my thoughts today,
everyday since you went away.
Author notes
For my loving son Brian who passed away suddenly March 2, 2007.
Today is Mother's Day and also his birthday. I miss you Brian so very much.
A contest entry
- you are in my thoughts today... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 9, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hush Little Baby by SomeonesToySoldier.
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Comments
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Im sorry you lost your son and that his birthday fell on motherday. That must have been so hard
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thanks for sharing -
love the last phrase!
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Thank you for reading Wade. It meant alot to me. Blessings to you. Hugs and Smiles on this day.
Sandy
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This is a really touching poem about your son, it's heartbreaking. I can't ever imagine losing a child, thank you for entering.
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I'm sorry for the loss of your son. My son never made it into this world. He and his mother died before he was born. Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck
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beautiful
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Thany you for reading asnd commenting.
Take Care,
Sandy
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beautiful
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Nice Comment
Thank you June. Your comment was very nice. Hope you enjoy this beautiful spring day that has arrived.
Bless You,
Sandt
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"Brushed up against memory..." What a beautiful first line. What follows is an expression of tender and loving remembrance. Very touching and heartfelt. great write. Clearly expresses the deeploss that you must have felt. My heart and prayers go out to you.
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Beautiful Commwent
Thank you for this most lovely comment. I appreciate you dropping by. It was very comforting to resd. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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*sigh*
I am just speechless after reading this. Not sure what to add except beautiful words.
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this is just how it does feel and what we have left traaces and memories
sad but true poem
i am so sad for you sandy gram
bless you
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Thank you so much for reading. Hugs. Bless you. Sandy
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What a swell mom you were and still are. Brian would say this a million times just to let
You know I his book there is and can only be one mom, friend, helper, and someone to go to when he needed close attention to losten to him. I feel you were the greatest person in that boys life, like we all try to be in our own childrens' lives, good, best and most needed friend Sandy.
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Thank you Mac. Your comment was so lovely and touches my heart. You are such a dear asweet friend. Bless you for always being so kind and thoughtful of others. Take care, Sandy
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Absolutely Beautiful
Wow, I started to tear up on this one.
It was beautiful, Sandy.
So full of emotion. So heartfelt.
You have such talent.
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Hello Steph. Thank you so very much for this lovely comment. This was a hard poem to write but it helps to share my love for my dear Brian. God Bless you. I hope things are going well for you. Tske care, Sandy
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LOVING AND TENDER!!!!
One can feel you heart and love in each word my friend. You need not fear for he is watching down over you with his love and care.
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Thank you Kevin. I so appreciate your thoughtful comment. Bless you my dear friend. Always here for you. Sandy
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BEAUTIFULLY SAD
Please pass the tissues for tears are flowing and feel as though my heart shall break
Your words are so very beautiful for your treasure that has now gone on...Words only a Mother could feel Thank you kind soul for sharing with me your Son
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Thank you for this heartfelt comment. It is most appreciated. You take care. Blessings to you. Sandy
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Beautiful!
Dear Sandygram, I cannot imagine the grief of a Mother for the loss of a child.
'Creep into my mind and caress,
my disguised pain and loneliness.
Empty place once shared with glee,
my first born son not here with me.'
The memory of his love comforts the pained place.
I imagine that he is never gone but always right in the nook of your heart. This is a beautiful poem. Jane
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Your comment was lovely. Thank you for stopping by and reading. Most appreciated!!! You take care, Sandy
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That lose
Sadly we can only hold onto the memories. For me as I age it seems that is all I have, Beautiful write as always
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Wonderful Comment
Good morning Bob. I hope all is well with you. Thank you for this lovely comment. I always enjoy when you stop by. You have a wonderful weekend. take care, Sandy
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Heavenly traveler that you be,
now living life eternally.
You are in my thoughts today,
everyday since you went away.
I am sorry for the loss..The truth of this bitter life is shown here with the sentiments of heart as you are witnessing the whole show in front of you..a painful experience you are describing to us..a thought provoking immagery is witnessed here through the great heartfelt verse of yours..Thanks for entering...
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Thank you for this lovely comment. It is most appreciated. Thank you again for the Bronze!!! Have a wonderful weekend. Blessings to you. Sandy
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Awwww. This is such a precious poem, Sandy. You poured your heart and soul into this one. Well written. Your talent with words does show within these lines. I love this. It makes me think of my mom who will be gone from this earth 20 years next March. Good luck!
Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Thank you so much Donna. A lovely and heartfelt comment Bless you, Sandy
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This is beautiful. It reminds me of my love. He was taken suddenly as well in a car accident on July 29, 2005.
I hope you find solace in knowing that he is in a better place. It is hard to move on when losing one so dear. I myself am still lost in the past and my own sorrow; I hope you do not dwell on such things as I have.
Best of luck in the contest.
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I am sorry about your loss. This poem is very beautiful and peaceful. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a great poem. I know how you feel with losing someone. I miss my Grandmother that died when I was 3, and my one of my best friends that died in 2004. I miss them so very much. This is the best poem writen for a loved one that I have read on this site. Thanks for the great write.
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I'm sorry for your loss. This is beautifully written! I love it!! the way it's so personalized, it just makes it ten times better and more beautiful! keep up your amazing work! and best of luck in the contest!!
Crimson
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