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Bloody Mates...(Extreme Adult Content)

 

Taking the day of work just to ease my worries
but I had my suspicions.

I don't fucking believe it, after waiting two hours in the fucking pouring rain,

watching who comes and who goes to my house.
Thinking she's a good girl should of known better than to think she would

do anything behind my back.


Than that sneaky little fucker comes round to my house,

my wife...and to think we are mates?


"Playing away with my fucking wife"

I will have his fucking eyes...the fucking bastard.


Right...right what to do...what to do,

play it cool keep your head.

 

"FUCKING KILL HIM...I KILL HIM"

 

FUCKING BASTARD...FUCKING WHORE...FUCK IT...

FUCK IT...FUCK IT...WHAT A FUCKING BASTARD.

What a fucking backstabbing fucking bitch,

after everything I had done for her

she does this to me...

 

AAH...I'LL FUCKING KILL EM...AAH


There remember not to fuck with me for eternity,

or any fucking one else.
Right I will sneak round the back to the shed,

get the Axe, who gives a fuck.


I do the time on my head...I don't give a flying fuck

he is a fucking dead man.


It's still here, he's fucking going to get some

where's my fucking Key?

 

Got it...Right sneak up the stairs
I can hear the fuckers...there still fucking.

 

He is in my house...with my wife...in my fucking bed.


"FUCKING...FUCKING MY WIFE FUCKING MY MATE"


(kicking the door down)

AAH...

Right you fucking cunts...this is the last fucking time

you pair of fuckers are going to do this.


Don't say a fucking word you streaky peace of piss Dave,
and you can shut your whore fucking cake hole up.
You fucking dirty fucking slut.

Ah fuck it...

You're both fucking going to get this Axe now

you first Dave...right you cunt come here.


"I plunged it straight into his chest...watching the fucker's eyes roll"

 

"I yank it quickly out"

 

Fucking blood squirting everywhere,

Fucking told you didn't I...didn't I...you cunt...


The whore of a wife...is screaming her slut mouth off.

"SHUT THE FUCK UP YOU'RE FUCKING NEXT"

Silence from her mouth...she looks at me

I can smell her fear...like a stunned rabbit...caught in car headlights

her eyes glazed over.

I look back at all the blood squirting from Dave's chest

Dave starts going into convulsions...

 

"Not yet you fucker...not yet"

 

I launch the Axe in to his naked flesh once more,

this time his cock and leg take the full impact.


And where the fuck do you think you're going you dirty whore?

 

"Get the fuck here"

 


She is now standing in the corner...I feel no love for her,

But my Axe wants to fuck her up good and proper.

 

Lighting ripping through my muscles...I prepare my Axe for the fatal blow.

I looked back at Dave and release my inner rage once again
launching the Axe into his face.


"His skull cracks and bits of flesh and teeth fly through the air"

 

She screams again...but I am oblivious to her sounds.
I have crossed the threshold and taken another man's live.


"NOW FOR YOU... MY FUCKING BITCH OF A WHORE"


Nothing to say 'GOOD'


I clench my hand around the handle of the Axe...shaking with rage...


WHY...WHY DID YOU HAVE TO FUCK IT ALL UP?

She looks at me...

 

 "KILL ME NOW" DO IT...JUST FUCKING DO IT"

 

I pause for a second... 'SLAG'

Then launch the Axe with all my might across her neck.

 

"THAT A FUCKING TEACH YOU...YOU FUCKING WHORE"


Her head now dangling from her shoulders by bits of neck muscle,

eyes still blinking, watching the last moments of her own life.

Blood shoots up into the air...like a water fountain

I launch the axe once again sending her head flying across the room. 

 

"I STARE AT HER DECAPITATED HEAD...YOU FUCKING WHORE"

 

Kicking it as hard as I can...it smashes against the wall

I then launch the axe into her skull splitting her head in two.

 

The whore's brains flying everywhere,

but she is not so fucking clever now is she...

 

 

Author notes

Option 2

i want you to envision you just caught your boyfriend in bed with another woman,also if your a man i want you to envision you just caught you girl in the bed with another man.I want you to kill them,


Author: Timespell

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  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    October 17, 2008

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    Wow. I can see why this has won trophies already & while the rage is certainly present & accounted for, to be fair - the use of "fucking" is slightly overdone for my personal tastes. Now, I will admit that word is one of my particular favorites & I use it frequently both in writing and conversation but for this piece specifically, I would have been interested to see what you could have used instead. Nonetheless, you gave me what I asked for & I appreciate your entry. Best of luck!


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    Wow....

    You have a very good way of telling these dark tales. I love it. After reading your other entry I had to read this as well. And so, this is another that gets my vote.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • Night Terrors
    August 2, 2008
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    a great read I enjoyed it thanks for the entr


  • Poetic Obscenity
    June 25, 2008
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    Shit Dude

    This is fucking amazing. =] Bloody, angry..no, way more than angry. Like psychotically pissed the fuck off. Wonderful job indeed. It kept me intrigued. It's not so much in poetry form,but i love it.

    Oh and the repitious "fuck" helped, ALOT. ^.^

    thank you for your entry and good luck


  • callmeZakk
    June 20, 2008

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    wow i think i just pissed myself i dont wanna get on ur bad side


  • Dorick
    June 16, 2008

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    Not for this contest, I want a piece that directs its focus on the prolonged torture of a calculated victim.


  • xxgothgirlxx
    June 3, 2008
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    That scred the hell outta me....omg...amazing


  • Super-GOREgous
    May 30, 2008

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    oh man

    yeah i feel whats going on here and i like what i read...this shit is sooo HxC and i looooovvvveeee iiiiiitttttt..... what competition . Thank You for Entering !!! -GOREgous Gore


  • LadyDementia gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    Awesome poem...love the graphic imagery portrayed, superb! Not read a good poem like this in..well its been far to long!! The start reminds me of me, I swear like that when I'm really mad It did get a bit much towards the end tho (even for me) but I still loved it! Keep it up and best of luck in the contest

  • yourguardianangel
    March 19, 2008

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    wow

    that was awesome!!! haha..i agree w/ bryant in that i think u overused "fuck" but otherwise this was great!! sooo gory but i loved it..


    • Timespell
      March 19, 2008
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      Thanks... I can only guess what someone would be thinking and saying...LOL, But it would have to be something pretty angry!

      Thanks for reading this one, glad you liked it.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Fim Fivver
    March 14, 2008

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    it fits the contest well but the poem its self was not one that i enjoyed. the repation of fuck made it seem like the 4th grader who says fuck just cuse it nuaghty. thank you for your write.

    Bryant J Fry

    • Timespell
      March 14, 2008
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      Thanks... I can understand what you're saying, but I would say these words are not actually what he is saying, but actually what he is thinking in his head. So to express is anger and rage, this is the only way possible.

      Thanks again for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • kill the lights
    February 2, 2008

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    Silence from her mouth...she looks at me
    I can smell her fear...like a stunned rabbit...caught in car headlights
    her eyes glazed over.
    I look back at all the blood squirting from Dave's chest
    Dave starts going into convulsions...
    "Not yet you fucker...not yet"


    deliciously gory and animalistic.
    thanks
    xx Sin


    • Timespell
      February 14, 2008
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      Thanks for awarding this one with your Silver Trophy.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Atrophya
    January 25, 2008

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    ah yes, I've been through something like this, but I didn't actually catch them and i wouldn't have massacred them like you did but everyone has their ways of dealing.

    i loved the anger and rage in this. i get like this at times especially when a loved one hurts me.

    you are awesome. loved it. :]

    Rain--x

    • Timespell
      January 25, 2008
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      Thanks


      Well I guess it would depend on how someone would take it. I don't think it would be to hard to imagine someone "Snapping" and actually doing this sort of thing...LOL

      Thanks for reading and commenting on this one.

      All the best,



      ~T.S~


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 18, 2008
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    Well yeah I could write my own version of what I'd do. I'd fuck the fuckers myself, I'd not kill 'em so fast, I'd make it slow...oh so very slow. But I'd tie up my partner and get them to watch me rape and slowly kill the person they cheated with and then keep my partner alive for a couple of days, torturing them. Hell, maybe even let them live... their head would be so fucked up they'd probably commit suicide anyway!

    • Timespell
      January 18, 2008
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      LOL...

      It makes me wonder just how far you could be pushed, before you finally "Snap" and go into psychopath mood.
      I can easily imagine that this has indeed happened somewhere or sometime before.

      Thanks again for reading.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

      • xxRainbowDawnxx
        January 18, 2008

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        I definately agree with you, heard some similar things on the crime & investigation channel, it's quite scary. Sounds similar to my Cheating Passions poem, which is basically about the same thing.


        • Timespell
          January 18, 2008
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          I will be going to have a look at your piece on this rather dark subject then...lol


  • Timespell
    December 10, 2007
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    hahaha.... cheers


  • Gerald Flagellation
    December 10, 2007

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    It's always nice to read a nicely written piece of prose. Unfortunately this isn't it. But you score for unpleasantness!


  • twilight seduction
    December 1, 2007

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    Ah, fresh hold' should be 'threshold,' otherwise, this was...wow. Excelletn murder description. I agree with Edna though, you could have made it better. Degrading them in death would have put your poem over the top.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    November 27, 2007

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    I quite liked this (apart from the numerous spelling and grammatical errors) as it is rather unpleasant. I think you could have added a little extra frisson by urinating on their bodies. So if you want a nice metal virtual cup. why not spell and grammar check?


  • Lord Merlynn
    November 19, 2007
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    *nods* good write, good luck.


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    November 9, 2007

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    HOLY=MOTHERFUCK

    AHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!
    FUCK!!!!!!!! I FUCKIN LOVE YOU!!!!
    HOLY SHIT THIS IS AWESOME! You are sooo fuckin good at this stuff.
    O.O
    JUST.......HOLY HELL.
    THIS LINE WAS AMAZING:

    "Then launch the Axe with all my might across her neck,



    THAT A FUCKING TEACH YOU... YOU FUCKING WHORE!


    Her head now dangling from her shoulders by a bit of neck muscle,

    eyes still blinking watching the last moments of her own life..."

    great job!!!!!!!!!!! KUDOS!!!!!!!!!!!
    I'M SUCH A HUGE FUCKIN FAN! LMAO

    • Timespell
      November 10, 2007
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      What more could she expect... LOL
      Death was coming for her
      Betrayed Husband.. Axe in Shed!
      Could only mean one thing...

      Thanks for reading and commenting on this piece.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • ExpectingMommy18
    November 8, 2007

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    wow this was wonderful exactly what i was looking for
    im sooo glad you entered this and i don't think your going to have any problem getting to the next round.

    i love all of the detail,im glad you paid attention,most people don't,lol.
    again this was great and i enjoyed reading it.
    good luck in the contest!

    • Timespell
      November 8, 2007
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      Well you asked for it...LOL
      I think anyone would have thoughts of killing someone if they found there partner in bed with there best friend!!

      Thanks for reading glad you like this entry for the contest.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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