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As I walk

As I walk many who were living are now dead,

As I walk those that die find peace.

As I walk the others of my kind wil give them their peace of mind.

As I walk the path for my is unclear,

Many roads are open to me but only one is correct.

I have walked long and far but many will not make it.

Those I pass will rest eternal as my Sin washes them away.

As I walk those that live are taken care of they can stay at that.

As I walk my name is Osiris, the lord of death.

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  • readit14
    November 23
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    Really good

    You seriously have a talent with imagery. and thats something to keep up


  • scribbleheart
    June 17
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    i love the last line. very powerful. its great description you've got going on there. well done.


  • Insane-Joe
    February 19

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    I must say this is a very dark and interesting poem...(if I think your poem is dark then thats saying something) very impressive!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 12, 2008

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    Many paths are open for all of us... it is hard to choose what one to go down sometimes!

    You seem to be a master of this kind of dark writing... Great stuff!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    January 12, 2008

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    I am commenting you for your talent, because it is good- not the subject. Death is the lowest nastiest thing ever hit the dirt in my opinion he should be stung to death with his own little bootleg stinger.


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    And my name is a secret only my Mother knows it


  • Jasmine Minx
    December 23, 2007

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    This is a very good poem and it really speaks true. Osiris nice job you may not always be the lord of death but you will always have my support as your friend. Nice job and hope to read more


  • Victoria of Aragon
    December 16, 2007

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    I like this piece; it's short and to the point. Reminds me of my own poem "We the Weary."

    Very interesting that you write about your character like this. o O; Most people just make vauge references, but you actually jump right in there and explain his role in life; nicely done.

    Victoria;;


  • abuyi
    December 10, 2007

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    nice intro.. As I walk those that die find peace.

    its veyr nice.. tells a lot about ur charecter.. death lord


  • shadow of the void
    December 4, 2007

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    great work. its sad, but scary at the same time. i liked the line "As I walk many who were living are now dead,"
    a sorty from the blood elemental, great work.


  • Amythest Rose
    November 29, 2007

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    uhhhhhhhhhhhh .............wow lol

    It's great Osiris whats really scary as that it does actually sound like you
    walking many roads but only one way is correct
    way to go pal keep it up

    p.s if i'm boring you here just say lol


  • BeautifullyBroken42
    November 28, 2007
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    This was a sad poem yet woderfly done. I love it!

    Great job!

  • carole21
    November 8, 2007

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    sad

    good write for this subject . . like "As I walk those that die find peace" . . "Many roads are open to me but only one is correct" . . repeating As I walk does work here . . good ending !!

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