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Daisies

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Remember when we were younger,
the many games we used to play,
when we were young, and sweet and innocent,
just to pass the the time away?

Those times when all the boys and girls
were just playing on swings and such
and the attractions hadn't started yet
or hadn't been noticed much.

Then all of a sudden that seemed to change
as we all became more aware,
the boys of girls, and the girls of boys
and the attractions that were there.

And once that started happening,
the games we played changed, too,
the boys would start with teasing the girls,
it's just something we would do.

And the girls, they started huddling
and talking about the boys,
which ones were hot and which were not,
and we all began our little ploys

to attract the ones we thought were cute,
the one's we seemed to like,
the ones that stuck within our minds
when the days turned into nights.

And we'd often play one other game,
as puppy love set in,
we would pick ourselves a Daisy
and with it we'd begin

to pull the petals one by one
from the Daisy in our grasp,
saying "she loves me and she loves me not"
'til we were down to one at last.

And if it didn't happen to turn out right,
the way we wanted it to,
we'd pull ourselves another one,
and we'd simply start anew,

'til there was but a single petal left,
with "she loves me" next in place,
and joy would enter into our hearts
and put a smile upon our face.

But those days are far behind us now,
though those questions arise again
when that very special lady
happens to enter the hearts of men.

And too old we are for those Daisies,
or the joys that they once brought,
for even a petal pulling marathon
would all be done for naught

when we face that age old question
that has plagued the hearts of men,
of "she loves me or she loves me not",
and will this heart be broken once again.

So all we can do is hope and pray,
pulling petals in our minds,
hoping the love you have and hold for her
will not be left behind,

and that in time those words will finally come
from this woman you've come to know
and bring the joy that final petal pulled
brought so many years ago.

 

 

 


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Option 8: Liebe, Amour, Amoros, Love. Just some beautiful love, just make me feel the love you feel or are trying to convey.


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  • daviscth silver member
    May 9, 2008

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    This truly could have been take right out of my childhood!! I love it, it's awesome and I really LOVE it.


    • The Madman silver member
      May 9, 2008
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      I think we all played these little games when we were younger.....but even still if single, though we may not actually pull petals, we do so in our minds, she loves me, she loves me not....Thanks once again for your nice comment,

      Evan


  • creationsfromheart
    March 9, 2008

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    this si a beautiful peom, I do not see where you could of lost your muse with such wonderful poems you pen, I feel the love you hold with in the rhyme is very pleasant and not over done, This is a gorgious poem, I would of granted you gold for sure


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 21, 2008

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    Beautifully written. Love is so magnificent. I love the imagery you used here and how expressive your love is. The rhyme is wonderful too


    • The Madman silver member
      January 21, 2008
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      Thanks once again for the nice comment on this work,

      Evan


  • Sia
    January 18, 2008

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    Thanks for entering!!!!

    This was so precious. It made me remember when I wished upon flower petals. Wonderful job, and Good luck in the contest ^_^ @>}-

    • The Madman silver member
      January 21, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I think we all do that in our lives attimess, when young just as told
      above, and when older in our thoughts. Thanks again,

      Evan


  • infinitechaos07
    December 30, 2007

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    WOW, this is beautiful! I remember playing that game lol. But tell me what is love, something you can't put into words. And to a young one it is like a game until it is truely experienced. Very beautiful poem here! I loved every line! The flow is great... also the imagery. Thanks for entering my contest, best of luck!


  • raggyann
    December 27, 2007

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    oh he loves me he loves me not
    what a joy this poem just brought to my heart
    i just went down memory lane
    and yes asmile formed on my lips as i read this beautifuly written poem
    oh how i love this poem


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    December 27, 2007
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    Thank you so much for your entry in our contest 'Love' to look for the best 'rhymer' on Allpoetry, in our opinion.
    As we have had nearly 100 entries this has been a difficult contest to judge and although not a winner, we thoroughly enjoyed reading your entry.
    We hope that you will enter the rest of the rounds in our Rhyming Extravaganza.

    All the best Sue and Jeff.


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    December 20, 2007

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    Falling for someone you've known since childhood, the same thing happened to me, Nice job on this it was a great write and I could really relate,



    -Steve-

    • The Madman silver member
      December 20, 2007
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      Thanks again....the games we play as children seem to hold true even in adulthood when love strikes us...but pull those petals in our minds instead of for real. Thanks again for your nice comments,

      Evan


  • CherryOnTop
    December 19, 2007

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    This was so beautiful.When life wasnt so difficult.When men and women honored and respected each other.


    • The Madman silver member
      December 19, 2007
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      Thank you foir this visit and the kind words left onthis work,

      Evan


  • leander Moderators member
    December 15, 2007

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    This poem started out very strongly, though it lost a bit of its strenght toward the end because the flow that seemed to be staggering here and there...

    Anyway, thanks for this entry as well!
    Leander


  • seasonsoflove
    December 13, 2007

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    wow... this is beautiful! it really shows how life progresses, from little kids to older people who dont seem to have time for game playing. anyway, great job and best of luck in this contest!
    ~rocklover91

    • The Madman silver member
      December 14, 2007
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      Thanks for the visit and fro the nice comment. Guess this was written for a current lady in my life i have fallen for and this waqs wriien for her and basically a statement that even tough we are ages older than those days when we pulled Daisy petals about our young loves, we essentially do the same in our minds no matter what our ages may be, for we will always wonder,

      Thx again,

      Evan

  • creationsfromheart
    December 4, 2007
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    Brilliant as usual!

    This is awsome when I saw daisy you caught me and than as I beag to read you drug me in where I could not stop reading it is always a pleasure to read your wonderful writes!


    • The Madman silver member
      December 4, 2007
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      Thanks for visiting my pages once again and for the lovely comment you have left on this page,

      Evan


  • Ithica silver member
    November 30, 2007

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    I really REALLY liked this one! Oh all those memories you brought back, put a smile on my face. We all have our silly sweet phase of growing up. Thanks to you I ventured back to remember it... Thank-you!

    • The Madman silver member
      November 30, 2007
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      Thank you again so much Marcia for visiting another of my works and for the beautiful comment you left here for it. Yes those sweet innocent days, so young at heart.. but the same thoughts we had back then can and do often affect us today only we pull those petals in our thoughts instead of our hands,

      Thanks again,
      Evan


  • Lj-
    November 28, 2007

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    Very cute.

    Favorite lines:
    "the ones that stuck within our minds
    when the days turned into nights."


    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.


    • The Madman silver member
      November 28, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your visit to my works and your kind commebts,

      Evan


  • psychiatrists dream
    November 28, 2007
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    brilliant poetry, beautiful. thanks for entering and good luck!!


    • The Madman silver member
      November 28, 2007
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      Thank you for your visit and for the nice comments left for this work.

      Evan

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    November 25, 2007

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    Oh wow hun this is truly beautiful, I have to admit to doing this with Daisies too and cheating until I got one that said loves me... it's true it doesn't work quite the same way these days.. but this is perfection personified....

    Karen

    • The Madman silver member
      November 25, 2007
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      Oh wow hun this is truly beautiful

      Thx once again Karen for you visiting one of my writes and for yet another lovely comment you have left for it here,

      Evan

      Still pulling,

  • lyrebird
    November 23, 2007

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    This is a great piece of writing.
    It so clearly describes what it is like to go from childhood to adolescence to adulthood.
    Aww, jeez, I can still remember pulling the petals off daises and so on!

    Great write, congrats on the trophies that you have already won and good luck in the new contests!

    <3 Jojo aka sinnocence

    • The Madman silver member
      November 23, 2007
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      This is a great piece of writing

      Thank you so much for taking the time to stop in. Yes most everone cam relate to ding that silly asit was, yet somehow, it still sicks with us...maybe not daisy in hand but certainly inmind at times. Thank you for teh nice comment.

      Evan


  • lizwicker
    November 19, 2007
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    Beautiful..wow and also so true... i love it .. thank you for shareing ... and good luck in my contest


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 18, 2007

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    HEy I recognized this one from my husbands contest I really liked it. But it was his contest This poem is so true many can relate. Man I wish He would have picked this one.Brat he is.


    • The Madman silver member
      November 19, 2007
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      HEy I recognized this

      Maybe he needs a spanking...lol. Thanks for you visit and kind comments, Cara,

      Evan


  • Angelic Princess21
    November 17, 2007
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    very nice write. thanks for entering and best of luck to you

  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 17, 2007
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    Ah, we all remember those childhood days, I wonder just how many daisies have died in the name of true love, or not!

    A wonderful poem, well written, well rhymed and it bought a smile to my face, thank you for that.

    I'm off to read some more of your work now.

    Thanks again,

    Sue


  • 2lullabyhaven
    November 17, 2007

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    I've never seen a man being so romantic with his poetry
    this is new to me, I commend you, Sir, on your chivalry and good taste in poetry

    • The Madman silver member
      November 17, 2007
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      I've never seen a man

      I think one of the nicest comments I have yet to receive from anyone on anything I have shared to date and coming from you, quite an honor. Thank you so much, Pat..

      Evan


  • azlyn gold member
    November 15, 2007

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    How very wonderful...I remember those days as well! So well written and so sweet!!! Loved it!

    Love~
    Az

    • The Madman silver member
      November 16, 2007
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      How very wonderful

      Thx again, azlyn. I have come to respect your opinion so deeply and such nice comments on this work does mean a lot..glad you liked it...


  • DrunkenRam
    November 14, 2007
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    Guilty (Everybody's guilty)

    Thanks for entering my contest, I will comment after it is over.


  • PureRomance
    November 12, 2007

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    This was a very beautiful poem indeed. You said I would love it and that I did. You are very talented. I look forward to reading more of yours.


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 10, 2007

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    I loved this one. A very well written poem. This is so true. I have found myself doing that when I was younger. The joy of getting "she loves me" always brighten my day. But back then I wasn't quite sure about the whole lesbian thing. Thanks for entering such a fine piece and good luck to you in the contest.


  • TangibleTattoos
    November 10, 2007
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    this is completely amazing! i love it.


  • VioletMasquerade
    November 10, 2007

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    Cute

    You have a well written poem here. I don't think it fits very well, into my contest that is. The theme is cute, but not extremely deep. I like it a lot, but not for this. Good luck with your other contests though!


  • Jersene gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    This certainly speaks from the heart. I love the reference to the daisies...easy to relate to, since I think most of us have done this...The way we dream, hope, long to be noticed/loved...something we never lose with age, thus why the innocense of picking the petals from the daisy fits so well. Enjoyed this write!

    • The Madman silver member
      November 16, 2007
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      This certainly speaks from the heart

      Thx Jersene. And yes, sometimes those things we do and go through oft follows us along in our lives, pulling proverbial petals later in our lives as love once again touches our hearts. Thx for stopping and for your nice comment,

      Evan


  • BeautifulFlame
    November 8, 2007
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    Very sweet and the words were beautiful. Heres to Daisies and love!
    Again Welcome to AP!
    Your writes are outstanding.
    ~Lisa~

    • The Madman silver member
      November 8, 2007
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      Thank you for your kind words Bejeweledone..uffdah that's a long one! Busy uploading a few more and then will begin to check out some of yours and others that have commented here. This seems to be a nice site, with good people.

  • The Madman silver member
    November 8, 2007
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    Just wanted to add...

    Just wanted to add that I have a site set up for all the poems written for her and on this page I added a nice little effect with few Daisey petals falling down the page...makes it a bit more special I guess. And no, she hasn't seen it yet...lol. Still pulling petals in my mind on that.
    Thanks again everyone,

    Evan


  • Artistic-Soul
    November 8, 2007

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    amazing

    i am stunned at the incredible talent displayed in this peice its just magnificant
    it has such a wonderful flow that just winds around the poem and keeps the reader captivated
    it tells the story we all know and even though its not any different from the way its always been told as far as the content it was almost like looking at an old photograph you know whats in it but your taken aback by what you are seeing and this poem just has that same remaniscent tone and i just love it
    wow just wow this is just wow
    thank you for the entery

    • The Madman silver member
      November 8, 2007
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      Wow.....guess I've just received what must be the ultimate of compliments. Thanks so much for these words of praise for what comes from within. And thank you too, Bas....and everyone else. It's nice to hear others thoughts on what I write, especially when everyone is so kind in giving them. Ahh...the trials of a long distance "internet" relationship. And the quandary of letting her see this last of many written for her.....or not. Time to start pulling petals I guess..do I or don't I?

      Thx again everyone..

      Evan


  • Ephiphany
    November 8, 2007
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    awwww

    this is beautiful and passionate in your heart.

    Thanks for this entry.


    • The Madman silver member
      November 8, 2007
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      thx

      Thanks Ephiphany for your kind words..and yes, hoping, waiting to hear those words...
      Evan


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 8, 2007

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    Welcome To AllPoetry

    This is a very impressive write. It flows wonderfully and speaks to life and how it changes, but our hearts just ask the same questions. Beautiful poem. AP is pleased to have you here and we all hope that you enjoy the site.

    JeannieD

    • The Madman silver member
      November 8, 2007
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      Thank you Jeannie...appreciate the nice comment. Just new here and a lot of site navigation to be learned and suc. And yes, our hearts do ask the same questions throughout life...and online loves, internet romances from a distance adds a new flavor.

      Thx Again,

      Evan

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