Who are you, stranger?
You who wander in and out of my thoughts,
You who will step into my open heart;
The door swinging wide in the gusts of youth.
Where are you, partner?
You with whom I want to dance the steps of the future,
You who I want to hate, then forgive but always adore,
Emotions blurred together in the haze of love.
The map of my years is before me,
The road I have yet to tread clearly marked,
But where are you? You are illusive as smoke,
But someday, I’ll turn around and see you,
Stepping out of the air, into my life.
All comments appreciated, I've not been writing poems for very long, so please let me know what you think!
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I love it, great poem
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Spectacular
This is quite beautiful and powerful indeed. I truly enjoy the poetic layout of this piece, as well as the word choices. I feel oddly attracted to this poem, and I feel I can strongly identify with it. So I thank you, for the excellent read.
-Frost
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Great job on this. You have a real talent here! Keep up the excellent work!
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Well done! We all have felt like this in our
lives. We all search for that special someone
for ourselves. Great work here and I love the
title of it! Keep it up and thanks a lot for
sharing it here!
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Excellent Poem Dear I enjoyed reading this one, It has great flow to it as well. keep the pen flowing this was such a great write may you be blessed with more
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"You who I want to hate, then forgive but always adore,
Emotions blurred together in the haze of love." this is a lovely phrase and expresses what so many undoubtedly feel. nice job. -
This is a very beautiful poem about wanting your one & only. I love it. I'm sure that many of us can really relate to this poem. It is very deep and well-worded too. You did an excellent job with this piece. I love it. God bless you for sharing it and thank you for joining the group.
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Excellent Write
I loved your poem here. To be young and yearning for the one and only. I love how you say where are you! The title Mysterious Stranger is so perfect. The flow and imagery of this poem is perfect. You are gifted and thank you for the very nice read.
Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Great poem. It flows very well.
Best Wishes
-Nessa
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beautiful
really well written! the emotion and desperation expressed is truly amazing
keep it up
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Lovely and sweet!
Very well done! I really liked it. And also like people before me have said, i feel its about someone who will oneday be in your life, but you don't know ho it is. I like the way you are asking, who and where are you, and you look forward to finding out who this unknown special person will turn out to be! I really like the last line, 'Stepping out of the air, into my life', they will suddenly appear, that had a good effect.
Keep up the exellent work!! Eva xx
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i like this. Are you speaking of someone you dont know but is your future. Its like a dream but one will be a reality.Your words are raw and poignant. I think you spoke form the heart. I think that is matter the most. Because most people cant do that. If you have that downpack you have already won the battle. I enjoyed this continue to write from the heart.
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I liked the simile 'illusive as smoke' and the questions here. This is a very good poem which I liked a lot.
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