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Empathy Eliminates Disparity

 
Shows not the softest candlelight
whence springs pheromonal insight
as tenderness finds wings for flight
two generate true current bright ?
Dwells not in magic spell a part
to warmly welcome counterpart ?
 
No story’s glory may there be
without complementarity
which weaves warp, weft, proactively
to spin cocoon serenity
dissolving walls, near, far apart,
soon spanned, refusing hard rampart.
 

Two glow serene as empathy
eliminates disparity,
giving, taking, flowing free
kaleidoscope in harmony.
Swells not to tenderness one part
but part responds, hearts love impart.
 
Contentment scents sincerity,  
Man, maid soon braid eternity,
seed need, need seed, as two, in key,
days’, nights’, delights, in verity
all flows together, heart to heart,
artless ardour’s stars’ compart.
 
No discord and no cord we see
disturb, perturb, love’s symphony
whose magic music minstrelsy
mocks locks, blocks shocks, cacophony,
as Venus, Mars, through Cupid’s dart,
invent warm universe apart.
 
Shows not the softest candlelight
whence springs this source of second-sight ?
Bells chime not to old echo quite,
new notes lend throat to rhyme delight,
know neither end nor vulgar start,
as all streams from destined depart.
 

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  • Heroesrox
    March 15

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    This is brilliant. I like this one a lot. keep up the great work. Thanks so much for the share and best wishes to you. Keep up the great work. very well deserving of that silver it landed you.


  • Kathraina gold member
    January 1
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    This is a very awsome intricate piece. BRAVO!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • unavailable
    September 15, 2008
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    this is sweet reading.


  • EmmaLuLu
    April 26, 2008
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    great flow in this poem x x x


  • Swan song gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    well done here This is very solid and well composed
    and making my job difficult


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 23, 2008
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    Congrats on your trophy and on a lovely poem thanks for your submission.


  • janejainejayne gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    'as tenderness finds wings for flight
    two generate true current bright ?'

    This is lovely for the eyes to fall on...
    I was so pleased to see your words here.

    'Two glow serene as empathy
    eliminates disparity,'

    This line is like the comfort of a hug from a dear friend...

    I love the use of two. It makes the lines so personal.
    You are always one of my very favorites here at AP
    it is a joy to read what you write. Jane



  • rhondasail
    November 9, 2007
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    You 'wove' a lovely poem here and it deserves well the award of silver. Peace to you, Rhonda


  • Sandygram silver member
    November 9, 2007

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    CONGRATULATIONS on winning the Silver Johnathon. This was a very beautiful poem that touches the heart deep within. Your words create sweet and soft imagery and are written from your heart. This was such a delight to read this morning. A lovely Poem!!! You take care.

    Sandy


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    new notes lend throat to rhyme delight,
    know neither end nor vulgar start,
    as all streams from destinned depart

    This is wonderful image of the heart revealing the various aspects and the immageries of revealation
    to bring the mystical fel over the surface..the sentiments have been placed so smooth and so beautiful way of expression..it touches the heart at
    various places and knocks the door of the soul of the
    readers as well..Indeed a great heartful poem is here..Thanks for entering..


  • sshevak
    November 8, 2007

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    Perfect

    Silence is the best comment I guess.. You're excelling in
    writing, we already know that.

    Your Sheva


  • Lily of the Valley
    November 8, 2007

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    AP is full of love poetry but occassionaly there is a piece like this that really stands out from the crowd. I think the title of this poem communicates as much as the content of the stanzas and is captivating in itself. I see Night Hope has chosen the same stanza to highlight as I would have done and I think that stanza shows how a loving relationship should be. What I like about this poem as a whole is it speaks about love in the broader sense yet it may also be applied to or from personal experience. Good luck in the contest.


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 8, 2007

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    "Two glow serene as empathy
    eliminates, disparity,
    giving, taking, flowing free
    kaleidoscope in harmony.
    Swells not to tenderness one part
    but part responds, hearts love impart."

    Sighhh...Gosh, what a beautiful & heart~warming piece this is, my Friend. You are such a talented Soul, Scribe. Best of luck in the contest, Sweetie. Wanda

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