Love is the same thing
that makes the stars shine
and the leaves
fall off autumn trees.
It snuggles into you
until it becomes
a tumor you adore,
arriving in the night
and embedding itself
into your loom.
A tapestry
made of the sky
and earth.
I used to keep a tally
of how many cigarettes
he had in a day.
But the smoke got
in the way of my thinking
and his lips
licked off the
chalk marks
in my mind.
He gave me new
spools of thread
weaving himself
between
the sky and earth.
I kiss
the sun goodnight.
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please comment.critque.
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- you are in my thoughts today... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 9, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
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He gave me new
spools of thread
weaving himself
between
the sky and earth.
Great immagery is here..you took me there in the beauty of your vision..such a picture of love and its life and such a impact you brought to me..I can't express it...Indeed you made me to think through your thought provoking verse here....that what a truthful flow and the touch of the openness is seen in your wonderful words ..
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Thank you!!!
I'm glad my feelings followed
through into this piece!!!
peace to all ~flight
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Awww...I wish you would have entered my contest...this is what I'm looking for and none of them had it! Beautiful! Good Luck in the contest!
Angi
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Aww, I thought about it, but by the time I was done
writing it was closed
peace to all ~flight
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I love this... the metaphors in this not only add a place to be descriptive, but also beautiful.... such a bold write wall I read. Great job Johanna
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Thanks!
peace to all ~flight
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this is adorable johnnna. genuine and truthful.
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Thanks dearest!
peace to all ~flight
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