As you reach for me
across the brow of an endless dream
while thoughts tinker with memory
reminding me of an insatiable desire
flooding my body like raindrops,
[so softly, so slowly]
you cup my face with your hands
and tell me you love me—
and you’ll never let me go
and that’s all I need to know
Author notes
Mmm...not really...
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Nice imagery. Good flow and structure. I really like the line "...flooding my body like raindrops," Great imagery in this line. Thanks for sharing.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Beautiful, and Great Imagery!!
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Oh, this was beautiful, simple yet to the point, very much full of emotion!
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Beautiful
Oh I really like this. It sounds so soft and tender. It's such a beautiful love poem. Nicely penned
Gaylene
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very nicely done. love the feel of this and the flow. never should anyone be satisfied with words only, for to survive we need depth of love, actions with feelings, shown emotions.
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this is really a wonderful write. it captures the reader and takes them on a visual yet emotional ride. wonderful imagery. you are a very talented young lady. keep writing! i will look forward to more of your works. God bless you always
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This was really good, Jennifer. I think the flow and simplicity of it was just a really good combination, and I think you have one hell of a talent in writing. I'll be reading your future poems, too.
Keep up the great work, Jennifer. I'll be looking for he next installment of your magnificent talent here on AP. -
First of all, welcome to AP! I hope you'll enjoy the site.
This is a very romantic poem. It has some nice images, such as "flooding my body like raindrops" or "you cup my face with your hands". You have painted a very cute image in my mind. However, most love poem writers find themselves having some difficulty in expressing their feelings in a unique way, since this is such a popular theme, so you might like to work a little on that (as most of us do )
One other thing I liked about your poem is how the title fits it without quite giving out its content.
Should you post other poetry that you'd like comments on, you can let me know through a message.
All the best,
~Diana
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love the imagery kepp it up
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