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Wolf

The wolf leaps into the air
Away to freedom that has long since passed
A place that no mortal being may compare
Somewhere beyond their dreams that were cast

In to the woods and over the river
Through the hearts of all men
A beauty and grace that make all of them quiver
For they will never see it again

Her family follows close behind
Never leaving her alone in this desolate place
Their fate utterly entwined
Far away from this horrific space

For men has always hunted them
Cruelly and without remorse
Only wanting to condemn
Which they thought was their only course

They never understood
Never seemed to care
Only did what they should
To cause hopelessness and despair

So her and her family must run away

Away to the only place left to go

Past the light of day

Toward the ominous snow

 

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  • piccola silver member
    April 11, 2008

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    Made me think of the cruel wolf traps that are outlawed but still in use. This was a moving write with nice rhyme and flow. I'm not sure, I think in line 5. it's into and not in to ... you might check. that always confuses me.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 18, 2008

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    Took me to an imaginative place in the forest in the snow ...great write I thank you for your entries!

  • Rosser
    November 19, 2007

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    I love the imagery; I could see the wolves running in my head as I read this. I feel a sense of loss too, since the pack had to leave their home from the hunters and the people who care about the wolves won't see them again. I love it.


  • Shining for You
    November 16, 2007
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    Thanks

    Thanks for the entry into the contest and good luck


  • Animalia-de-Flux
    November 12, 2007

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    ooh, i like the rhyming scheme u have behind it, but im not too sure about the hunting part, i didnt know wolves were hunted like that, but its very good, and shows how a wolf would have to live


  • korculablue
    November 8, 2007

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    Brilliant!

    I have always been fascinated with wolves and your words are wonderful. There is a sense of haunting mystery, mingled with the pain of centuries of being hunted down and slaughtered because of the incorrect legends about the brutality of wolves. I feel their desolation, their isolation.

    Your title is simple and direct. Your words give the message of the painful reality blended with the complexity of this hidden beauty of wolves and all the legends gathered about them.

    I loved this and look forward to reading more. Congrats.


    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      November 9, 2007
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      Thank you!

      It really means alot that it all makes sence. I was trying to make it seem exactly like that. But thank you again!


  • NyteShade
    November 8, 2007

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    wow this is pretty impressive, love what you have done with it, i like the descriptions. great work.

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