You placed me
sticky side up
on blades of grass
that stung as needles
beneath my paper shell skin,
leaving my lungs exposed
to nauseous fumes;
suffocation would be less
painful than the torture
that escaped your lips,
burning my dying flesh-
Your smile was all I needed
to remind me that death
was only temporary and
revenge rested in eternity
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-Your smile was all I needed
to remind me that death
perhaps it can be shortened to
your smile reminded me
First stanza rocked.
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wow...sad. and really makes the mind spin. good write.
It made my mind see torture in a new way...kinda not nice but very good graphic words.
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