and I shake
earth
into purple
with slices
of flower
and fire-wood
A contest entry
- speaks in purple by Cat.
700 points, ended November 14, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ah what grief is there to know? i love the short punchy feel you have here; purple. so many think of death as final but i know and don't ask me how but i know we are forever. sometimes i feel like i am 2 being a mad nuter in tantrum and other times i feel as old as time. flowrs and fire wood - let's burn the ache that constricts human spitits in the fear of leaing life.
easy to say perhaps hahaha but tru it with an apple in your mouth ha sorry i dive off on tangents sometims when io drink
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ah thanks for reminding me of this old piece- i like this one
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i am forever deleting poems and reposting them as new under new titles lol hahaha
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old poems old poems no prewrites welcome lol it annoys me when i see no pw's the hosts -only brand new poetry counts ha
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true.. i mean how can we actually abandon poems...? it is sad how many poets (me included) just ignore their old works... shame on me
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i love the economy of this piece - the interpretation is open because of sparse language- very nicely done-
i wonder about that "and" to begin the piece- i always feel as if when someone uses an and.. they are trying to sound poetic..
your words that make sense.. already do that for you
the and sorta just makes me wonder why?
excellent piece.. well done -
a nice economical piece, very good entry here...
al -
beautiful
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a very gifted poetess once told me to avoid the use of 'and' to begin a poem, it was some of the best advice i ever got on this site..i can't picture the 'slices' of firewood, but i am open to the poetic tone of it. i like the image of slices of purple flower..that is pretty.
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Very nice! Sparse imagery akin to Japanese poetry. Good luck in the contest.
Lisa
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The "slices" did it for me... thought-provoking and moving poem this is. Lovely poetry!
~ Nicolette
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Good
Looking to hear the rest this can't be all of it ,is,nt ?
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