It was an oiled instant in time,
smooth, glistening, endless;
your breath slid stardust across my cheek
as you poised in that almost-kiss moment.
A glance in the dark, a shimmer in space,
and,
for a second,
we were shining.
Author notes
This was a challenge for me--- how did I do?
A contest entry
- prompt 15 entries 40 words or less by Grey Mouser.
475 points, ended November 8, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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great write, good luck
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Very well done, this is superb. I am glad you stepped up to the challenge. Such a smooth passionate look at the prompt.
Love this line, "your breath slid stardust across my cheek".
Great write and thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser -
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Thank you so much!!!
.:Marie:.
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WOW, the last line is just beautiful. Beautiful.
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Excellently phrased and constructed--a perfect response to the prompt.
Bill
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Superb writing.. This poem leaves me speechless.. Beautiful choice of words and amazing description... You expressed such intense emotion and vivid imgaes..
An excellent read..
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You did great...love it, added a lot of glamour to the picture..All the best!
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Very well done! Good luck in the contest
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well done - challenge or not you wouldnt know it as it was well written many blessings always xxx
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I think you did outstanding!! great job on using the picture prompt.. Good luck in the contest.
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