Lying alone in the dark, thinking about you,
Wondering why our dreams didn’t come true.
There once was a time, when I loved you so,
Now I can’t even force tears as we let it all go.
For some reason I try to remember back when,
How every beat of my heart belonged to you then.
The tone of your voice was my favorite sound,
The touch your lips would make my heart pound.
We pretended to live in a world of just ours,
Long walks and love making under the stars.
Nothing else mattered, except you and me,
I wish that was how it continued to be.
But you and I know how the rest of this goes,
The damage done by the path that you chose.
You beat it out of me, all the love that I had,
And there was so much, which is why it’s so sad.
Addiction is death, if not of soul then of life,
And it turns inside like a dull, dirty knife.
One day you just changed, a habit had formed,
You were invaded, your shores were stormed.
I no longer mattered; your true love came first,
And that wasn’t me, which I think hurt the worst.
So as I lie thinking, alone in the night,
I reach for some answers to make this all right.
I grasp for some feeling like I had long ago,
I desperately plead for my emotion to show.
No compassion no hurt, not one bit of pain,
No loss of appetite, no tears run like rain.
Just like there’s no love, the anger is gone,
White flag in hand, my heart has withdrawn.
So I wont fight the night for feelings I can’t feel,
And just accept the fact that the emptiness is real.
Nobody misses a heartache, until it disappears,
Oh how Id feel so alive, if I could shed some tears.
Author notes
1- break up
A contest entry
- Opitions!!!!!! LOTS OF OPITIONS!!!!! by teenagefailure.
425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 48 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me depressing poetry you have. by karebear.
386 points, ended December 3, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love is more than a four letter word! by Unstoppable.
600 points, ended December 27, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - + I'll Never Stop Loving You + by ThatONEweirdChick.
900 points, ended December 31, 2007, 97 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on the silver! This poem blew me away and it was purely a great write. I'm so glad you added this to my contest. It's such a sad feeling but the emotion makes your poems flow well.
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"Nothing else mattered, except you and me,
I wish that was how it continued to be."
that stanza like made my life today! i LOVED this poem! i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
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This was good I think my favorite part is
"Nothing else mattered, except you and me,
I wish that was how it continued to be"
and then the let down with
"I no longer mattered; your true love came first,
And that wasn't me, which I think hurt the worst."
Wonderful
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this poem is beautiful. It is well written and full of emotion. Great write. THank you for entering my contest. my favorite line was 'nobody misses a headache until it disappears' Best of luck.
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Good Writing
To feel -- anything. Very sad how people's failures affect undeserving other people.
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Another wonderfully writen piece that captures the feeling with both accuracy and beauty. I know this feeling, this trying to stir emotion in one's own self, where does it go? How could a thing that could be so hot just freeze up and die? Is there a fuse slowly burning to the bomb of forgotten love contained within? Do we all explode one day, some as lady fingers, some as hydrogen bombs?
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SAD
This is quite possibly one of the saddest poems I have ever read. You are able to pull the reader in and make him feel as if he is beside you feeling you pain, hurt and anguish every bit as much as you. One can only imagine the heartache you are experiencing. A relationship that falls apart so tragically is very sad indeed. How we come out the other side is what ultimately matters. Everyone needs time to grieve about what is lost. Ultimately, we must all pick ourselves up, dust ourselves off and move forward. I pray that you are able to do this. It's the only way we are all able to survive adversity. Good luck in finding your way through life a better, stronger person as a result of what you have had to experience. I feel you will be a much better person for it.
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WOW
This is absolutely AMAZING
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This actually shows me someone who thinks of others than themselves. Very much a thinker, and most probably, (like I), a worrier. On top of this there is so much loyalty, it is unreal. What we have here is a chronological order of sadness, putting others first and being so very much the same throughout ones life. A very noble write indeed.
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Wow! This is really great! The rhyming is really good too! My favorite part is,
no longer mattered; your true love came first,
And that wasn’t me, which I think hurt the worst.
So as I lie thinking, alone in the night,
I reach for some answers to make this all right.
Because I love the rhyming their. Its really good! and I just love the words, the feelings that come out of the words! Great job!
Good luck in my contest!
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Images of soul deep pain
There is a dark beauty in this write. It speaks of a love that would have to heal a bit in order to die. I agree that tears are a gift of release that not all of us have at all times. You build imagery so well and as a story teller it was well arranged and well paced. My personal favorite was, "And turns inside like a dull, dirty knife" W.O.W. Wow!(check me out sometime)
Much Love
Dark
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Love Expression
So much emotion is expressed in this poem.So true how love we once knew was here and now gone.How we never let go and move on.How the tears that i need to shed i can't force them out.The pain our heart feels and the stress that we carry each and everyday.
Great Poem!!!!!!
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great rhyming, awesome write, beautiful and wonderfully written... keep writting...
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You express yourself very well with rhyme. Being numb is always better than being the heartbroken victim, at least you're in control. Very nice writing!
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Great rhyming pattern
Your pain is obvious and part of the cost of being an artist is a heightened sensitivity. However, part of the reward of being an artist is the ability to rebound and, through your work, find satisfaction and happiness again. Good luck and thank you for your kind words about my work.
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this is a very good write that depicts the failure of a relationship....been there, done that, and paid the lawyer to take away the pain lol...A very good read.
Rory
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You have captured the art of falling out of love...Outstanding job...
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Welcome To AllPoetry
You are a very talented writer! Your flow and expression of emotions are wonderful. I see from your other writes you have entered and won some contests, Congratulations! AP is very pleased to have you here and we hope you will continue to enjoy the site
JeannieD
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Thank you for taking the time to welcome and comment!
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