The diamond is loved by every one
With its flawless cut surface
If you held the diamond against the morning sky
You would think it was the sun
The diamond knows much of man's greed
It has seen what it can do
It ruins their trust and friendship
That they valued so much before
The rock is another story
It's ignored and insignificant
With it's rough surface and dirty exterior
No one pays much attention to it
The rock has seen many things
Man's violence he knows too well
But after many years of existing
The rock is privileged to see
Of man's happiness and of his love
For the people he really cares about
If one compares the diamond to the rock
Which is better, and what would you be?
As for me, I'll rather be a rock
Because of it's carefree life
And the things it can and will see
A contest entry
- What is Unwritten? by Sprite.
1000 points, ended May 4, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I reread.
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Nicely put! I'm not sure that I would want to be underfoot myself. But, your point is correct. A stone does see more. Meanwhile the diamond is seeing everything from one person's viewpoint. I especially like the "carefree life" of a rock. That is also true when you don't worry about trying to be beautiful all the time.
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Diamonds are beautiful but one of my least favorite stone. People have suffered for many years due to diamonds and still are to this day. Yes I would rather be a diamond in the rough. Thanks for sharing such an amazing write. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
hugs Theresa
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Diamonds are beautiful and magical, yet they are causing much greed and suffering in the world. I love the point that you make in your poem; Yes it is better to be a rock and be free than a diamond and be in bondage. Wonderful anology. Besides, one can never tell a "rock" by its outer appearance. I love the round ones that you open and the exquisite crystal formations insides. Geodes, I think they are called. Best of luck in the contest and thank you for entering!
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I really enjoyed this piece. Comparing the uncut, rough rock (disabilty) to the perfect, shiny, smooth diamond. (non-disabled). Writing how the rock may see the hatred of man, and the love of man for the ones they truly care for. Many a times a disabled person feels and sees the hatred of man, but they also get to experience true love from man. From their friends, family, and loved ones. Who support them and care for them, even though they may be 'different' and 'un-cut'. I really enjoyed this peice of work. Thank you for entering it. Best of luck. Hugs~Nikki
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Good Feel
I like how you convey the objects, the rock and the diamond. Talking about them as if they were almost human that can see and hear just as we do. I think this poem could use a little work on the flow but it overall message is really good. This is a very thoughtful poem making you think about these things when most people would not. Very well done. Keep up the great job.
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YES YES YES! y be a diamond and get all the glamour... i'd rather be a rock and live life simply!
Your words were true yet beautifil! this was a very "real" poem... and there was like a hidden message behind it! very nice poem wee!
Loved the way you described the "lifestyle" of a rock and a diamond! and what it can do to man! very well written! loved the comparison and structure... length was great!
Best of luck in the contest! amazing job!
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Great write, put like that I to would rather be a rock! This is a wonderful comparison. Good luck in the contest!
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