a calm whirlpool of souls
turning ever so violently
the tormented souls in peace
and the blue water tinted green
the sky turns a disturbing red
and lighting strikes ever so softly
a man appears in the light shadows
and he holds a cherry wood stick
and sweet strawberries turn bitter
the rules on which we depend on die
and the valiant knight of truth lies
as his eyes are seen for all they are
a mystery in stitches
the man with a cherry wood stick speaks
as he taps his cherry wood stick with power
the soft lighting strikes loud
and the shadows go dark
the sky turns a vibrant blue
and tormented souls become evil
as the water turns back to blue
so finally this man with a cherry wood stick
has brought this world to peace and harmony
but now a man with a red painted stick
comes to make everything fake,
once again.
Author notes
Word banks - Use as many words as you can.
Variations of the word can be used. You can also
work between word banks but if you do so you must
use 2 words from each bank and put your choices in
your author notes.
b ) mystery
depend
revelation
spindle
finally
bitter
repent
this poem is about how people always come along thinking that there fake way is actually better then your, but actually under that red painted stick that looks like a cherry wood stick is a twig they found on the ground.
A contest entry
- Options Galore by forever dreaming.
500 points, ended November 29, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The only think negative that I can say about this piece is part of the 4th stanza. You have used cherry wood stick in the 1st and second line but I can see where you are heading with this piece and I think that you have done a great job getting your point across. Well done and thanks for entering.
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I love the imagery and it's simply just a beautiful write. Thank you for the great read and best of luck winning that contest.
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ty =)))
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wow. this is amazing. i love it. the imagery was amazing,
I could feel it and see it with my minds eye. i freakin love it. wow.
it's awesome.
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ty =) !!!!!
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mmm
this is one of your harder poems to understand
ha, wanna help me out?
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yea dont blame you, its hard to explain the bottem pretty much makes the whole point its how people can work so hard for somthing and other people think they can just come in and make it better when all it is, the same thing but fake i guess, idk its hard point to make.
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