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Don't You Remember?


You were hitting me hard with your fists and words,
punching out life from my limbs.

You killed my spirit for life all because of the
love you had for me.

Did I love you?
Did she?
It does not matter.

You HURT me.
ME, you hurt.
HURT - YOU - ME!

LOVE
your Honor,
Your LOVER

Your love for me wasn't slick -
a dentist's drilling tool;
last month's razor's edge, ready to be replaced;
by the next young thing to join
the grocery cart.

This is the LAST you will hear from me.
Remember.

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  • Patpowersnoshoepoet gold member
    May 16

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    Wow Emily..this is an emotional work. I think you hit this one on the head for the words you put into this.THANKS for sharing.