young smile, wet
the boy decides—
chocolate lab
or
golden retriever?
his mind gnashes the decision,
so impossible to use labels
like “better”
pups getting anxious
they try showing-off
the retriever can
catch three balls
at once
but the lab
knows how to dance
in the end
he takes them both
but all the dogs in the kennel
start barking at each other
instead of cats up trees
Author notes
The poem above is metaphorical, the dogs represent people of different colours, while the boy represents God. What still happens in the end?
r&f
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hey! i got the dog metaphor on my own! yay!!! this was really good... amazing how you can write this way with such a great meaning behind the words... and if i ever bark at you.. well... i promise not to bite, k?
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AWESOME
its funny cause my dog is a choc. lab and is named Gnasher, like gnash.
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one off the rail
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lol glad you like
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Ohh I like this, the metaphor portrays everything wonderfully!!! I enjoyed this very much, thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest
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Glad you enjoyed.
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