When the world grows darker
And flames consume each part of me
I never give in and keep on fighting
Because I've not forgotten just what I'm fighting for.
I don't know which way to go
But not that it even matters
Because each time I reach out for you
You turn your back and walk away.
There's more to this life than this
I speak to you but sometimes
Sometimes, it feels as though
You're not even hearing what I say.
Stranded in flames there's where you'll find me
I've taken on so much more this time
I don't know how much more of this yearning I can handle
But, as I reach to my soul I find the strength to carry on.
I can take on any mountain
And cross the widest sea
There's nothing I wouldn't do
Just so I can get through to you.
I've given you my all
And for all you care
It seems as though I could just fall
And you would even watch me go too far.
I don't know if I ever will be good enough for you
You've got such high standards and it loses me each time I think about it
I can't be something that I'm not but although you've scourned me
And left me stranded in flames I'll find the strength to get out without getting burnt.
I wish you could see my heart
Breaking like it always does
You don't understand just what you do to me
You make me feel unwanted and beloved.
So you tell me it doesn't matter
Where at once was a heart of pure love
It's now dimming and starting growing
Colder and colder each day you treat me this way.
All I've ever asked from you was for you to love me
Not because it's your job but because you want too
All I have ever gotten was compared to everyone else
And it's time for me to take my stand, because I'm my own man.
Stranded in flames
It's making me stronger than what I have ever had to be
I found strength in such a sorrowful moment
I'll move on with or without you.
Author notes
Things we lost in the fire
A contest entry
- Things we lost in the fire... by Jai Guru Deva.
500 points, ended January 26, 2008, 85 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is only for the contest
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Holy shit. Two hearts thinking alike. I understand this completely. I'm sorry that you have dealt with so much pain and heartache. I've dealt with the same with my father, and some how I still manage to pick up the pieces and continue reaching out to him, and vice versa. The pain can never be forgotten and some times never forgiven. I hope things do get better for you. Stay strong and keep your head up high. Just remember, even though one person may not love you, there's someone who does...
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Awesome write
lol
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This is probably one of teh best i have read from you Awesome poem brother I wish you much luck with it in the contest
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WOW
wow this was very emotional.the background is really cool.
♥ steph
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Very emotional. Thanks for the wonderful entry and the creative background.
Good job and good luck.
All my love, DxD. -
this was so emotional
it puts tears in my eyes and sorrow in my heart
for you
some people do not know true love
so go on with your life
he has to face god one day for his actions
as for you you tried
so now let him go and go on my friend
he is not a father your fathers in heaven
bless you
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wow
i really like this i especially like the lines;
I can take on any mountain
And cross the widest sea
There's nothing I wouldn't do
Just so I can get through to you.
i love this great write
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wow. this is AMAZING! i can relate to so much in this poem. excellent write!
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Thanks
This poem is about my father.
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This is really heartfelt and sad.Love can get to us all and we always come back for more.Sometimes you wish you didn't want someone but in reality you need to.This brought out alot of feelings for me and I could relate to it well.Great job.
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Stranded in flames
It's making me stronger than what I have ever had to be
I found strength in such a sorrowful moment
I'll move on with or without you.
If you even knew...
I loved this.
Best of luck in the contest!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Straight from the heart, man.
Ah this is interesting.
Painful.
I read the first three stanzas, and need to go out in a few minutes.
Keep writing, keep revising.
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your poem is truly amazing, it's like complicated but simplistic at the same time, if that makes any sense, but i really do like it. It's powerful and shows true emotion.
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Very nicely done, It is hard however to read the font I see. I will see what I can do to make a better background out of this picture for you Scott
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This is great...from what I can tell.
The font and background combo are very hard for me to read.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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excellent write!
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Haunting
This looks very haunting. I am terribly sorry about the fire. Best wishes, my good friend.
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Very well done, my friend. You speak such truth and clarity within your words. Very relatable. Keep the ink flowing. Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Excellant
Ah, yes, experience often does help one to grow stronger emotionally. This poem was very well written with clarity of thought. You have my empathy.
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good job
this is very relatable , sad but willing , venting and without breaking , its nice to see something like this that doesnt end sadly .
~ ♥ Rena ♥ ~
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