She visits me at night sometimes
I step out of a party, onto the balcony
Chills drive my coat over my shoulders
Her back faces me, covered by a red dress
Figure and hair I never recollect
Mystery is what drives my speech
"Hello." My salutation splits through the icy air
Her head raises, yet she seems unaffected
She leans against the rail, gazing upon the city
Shall I speak again?
I hesitate, waiting for her response
Expecting it, fearing it, dreading it
With these fears and expectations, a flame of courage grows
It spreads into a fire, devouring the cold
The flame burns a release of words from my mouth
"You may not know me, but I know you.
I have heard much about you
and I know that you are the only one for me."
Her head turns to view my trembling self.
The results I view are shocking
She is revealed to be faceless
I sometimes wish I would see a face
Some nights I place one on her from reality
Washed away by rivers of disinterest and circumstance
Perhaps a face will never come
And a faceless girl will wander through my dreams
But someday, I will see her face and it will be beautiful
Author notes
This poem represents finding the right girl and how, at my age, it seems almost totally impossible
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great, i loved this.
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What concrete and phenominal metaphor you have playing throughout this piece! Faceless... Even the imagery I can come up with responding to the word is chilling. The way you described your feelings towards finding the right girl is extravagant. I believe you've accomplished something with this write.
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You're young. You got plenty of time of that. But a touching ending. Thanks for entering.
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yeah i know how you feel except vice versa for me is finding the right guy good take on the prompt it was very interesting
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