Woman
in all your amazing glory
Temptress... of immeasurable softness
just to have you
warm my bed... fill my soul
I have given myself away, again and again
I offered up my life and more
to spend a time, within your hidden treasure
captured again by your vision, I am lost... I herein surrender
Let me fall... within you
LeeL
Author notes
The scholars of the past know...
how much this form has changed, the the path of history
Napoleon once began a battle, unprepared, a week early
just to show-off for Josephine, in a letter.
As I sometimes do, when space is limited like this,(10 lines)
the first line in every stanza, becomes one more stanza
I do this for fun and to alter the meaning to another level
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt 10 entries/ 5 -10 lines by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended November 8, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Absolute beauty!
Here we go again! is there anyone alive and breathing
who can resist this poem?
excellent structures and just the right amount of sensuous touches with a heart bold and strong to display
his passions.
beautiful job dear poet!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))
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Kathleen
I wish your opening comment were true
We each have our thoughts on what is beautiful, in many ways
Thank you for liking my blend of words
Rick
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All I can say is "Wow"! This has rendered me speechless and that does not happen very often.
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Rick,
This was poetry at its best form. You can't beat love written in honesty.
The last verse and line was the most endearing and sensual part of this entire perfectly penned piece.
Lovely..
very enjoyable read.
~Lisa~
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Hi Lisa
Very nice comment
Thank you for caring for my words
Did you get the fourth stanza from my authors notes
Pleased you liked it
Rick
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This is what I call heavenly poetry Sir
I take my hat to you
The glory of Woman in so few words
Thank you
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Temple
Very beautiful comment
reflective of my own style
Please read somthing elce
I will read you later
Rick
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Hi Rick,
I'm not sure there's much I can say about this that hasn't already been said. It is soft and romantic, as is your natural style. I am generally horrible when it comes to picture inspiration writes, but this one suited you to a "T".
I think (as I often tell you, lol) I would have liked to see MORE, but it is good none the less and I see there was a line restriction...which you almost kept to. 
Nice work, hon.
Much love,
~J.
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Hi Trista
You are definatly one of thoes MORE girls
I could give more, but you see the problem I have here
This needed to be very compact, in a complete thought
Short set-up, create emotion in a few words, and make an end
Not much space to get my feelings out
Thank you for your thoughtfull comment
Rick
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MAGNIFICENT WRITING MR.
JUST ANOTHER AMAZINGLY BEAUTIFUL PIECE OF ART FROM YOUR HEART.
YOU MAKE LOVE SOUND BEYOND THE DEPTHS OF ITS MEANING.
YOU MAKE A WOMAN SOUND MORE BEAUTIFUL THAN WORDS COULD EXPLAIN.
I AM ONE OF THE BLESSED ONES, FOR I KNOW HOW IT FEELS TO BE LOVED BY YOU, EVEN YOUR FRIENDSHIP IS MORE PRECIOUS THAN GOLD.
LOVEANDBLESSINGS2U & YOURS ALWAYS
JOYCE
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Hi Joyce
A lot of nice words for me
You are a great cheerleader
Always pleased you like my thoughts
Thank you for caring for my friendship
Thank you for saying "ART"
That is almost as important to me, as the meaning I want to express
Rick
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This is an amazing write of beauty...the love of a woman and her form. Romatic and touching.
Wonderfully written.
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Hi Kim
Thank you for saying Amazing
Your very kind my friend
Rick
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Your such a beautiful writer; I love how you bring out the beauty in women. There's this guy you know who's making me feel right now and he doesn't know it yet. I want to tell him but I just don't want to mess things up.
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Poet
Thank you for reading my words
Never counsol in public
Nice you liked this
Rick
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Your author note of Napoleon made me smile when read in the light of this submissive verse. Very human poem here and so beautiful to read. You write well of temptation and the surrender to it...delicious ...Peace, Rhonda
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Hi Rhonda
Nice comment
There are some common elements that are unchangeable
Our need for shelter, water and food, and yes... sex
Read my quote from Plato on my Authors Page
We are drive by certain "Base Line" needs
the rest is just fluf to make these possable in life
Rick
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Very nice
Nicely written, strong words, but very warm and passionate.
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Steffany
So nice to have you read me
My words ARE strong, I have never learned to write wimpy poetry
I wanted to show how our minds are moved by passion
Thank you for saying warm and passionate
Love Ya, Rick
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Breathtaking...I adore this write..
As always your passion and sensual writes just leap from the pages and engulf the mind...
In addition I love the Author notes...smiles
Peace and many blessings
Best wishes with this entry,
~A~
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Asdzaa
Hi ~A~
I always like "Breathtaking" as a comment from a woman
I call the best I read "Amazing"
I wanted to make the point with my Authors notes
Our history is littered with changes in the corse
created by woman, Look at Mark Anthony and Egupt with Rome
Rick (forgive my spelling)
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"As these words wash over my mind, body and soul; they capture desires yet to unfold." What a beautiful poem about ones desires, love and passion...you are a masterful poet. To compose a magnificent read such as this. Your talent is explosive! just like beautiful firworks....write on....novy
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Novy
That is a hell of a Comment
I think you liked my words
I never know the outcome of my thoughts
I just let my mind proceed
Thank you, Rick
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As always, your passion for love and for passion is well expressed in these words. As I read, I think...God knew what he was doing...taking a rib from Adam, making him weaker and need the woman, Eve, to be whole.
lovely write
blessings,
Michelle
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Michelle
I think we are all impassioned to the flesh
some just more than others... Poets the most
Yes, he realy knew what he was doing
and though we resist, as men, we are slaves to the thought of this
Rick
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These few words have such depth of feeling a pleasure to read my friend. Just one point-: I think the first word should be WOMAN (single) not WOMEN (plural) Well done Val
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Hi Val
We are given five to ten lines
I did my best to fill them well
I made the change, after several sugestions
I agree it reads better, thank you
Rick
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BREATH TAKING
This is just beautiful and love the flow...It's so soft and warm to the heart
offered up my life and more to spend a time, within your hidden treasure captured again by your vision...sighs...Master Poet of stealing womens hearts
Can I have my breath back
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Breath Taking
I consider that to be a strong comment
Some words touch others more
I think you read this well
Thank you, Rick
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Beautifully expressed...so true, we do give our all for this gift. It is so amazing how one can adore the form of a woman with warmth and wonder...giving a kind and loving light to the desire within. Very sensual write...yet as soft as a poetic whisper. Lovely words that give such admiration to the picture. Very eloquently spoken! Best of luck in the contest!
Love~
Suzan
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Morning Sue
Thank you for saying
"a poetic whisper" sounds good to me
You are kind to read me
Rick
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