Vines squeezing the life of each
Smothered in our own waste
Dust among the angels
Overworked to restore faith
Given over to the greedy
They killed our planet now
Nowhere left to run to
Life the same no more
Enter the age of darkness
Whisper not a word
Author notes
How much longer can we last at this rapidly growing disease of greed for power.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt 10 entries/ 5 -10 lines by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended November 8, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - III by N e a r.
4000 points, ended February 16, 2008, 121 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hmmm. I don't really see how this poem deals with love. Then again... I see this as a poem WITHOUT love, with identifies with the whole purpose of it. The world is losing its touch with love and sharing. That is how I will view it.
And now with that said and done, I want to say that this poem is very deep and is definitely a poem worth the thought. Meaning, it makes the reader really think and consider what is happening in their surroundings. Great job at doing this!
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Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Thank you for the compliments on this poem! You see deep into my writing with an acurate eye! Don
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Excellent Writing -- OUTSTANDING
The poem goes so well with the picture. That woman (with wings) vividly reminds me of the best of what I'm still living for on this planet! Yes, indeed.
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Yes indeed!! Me too! Just love the ladies!! Only these days they are making some sense! That worries me!! LOL!
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Bloody Brilliant if you don't mind my saying and SO worthy of this golden trophy, you think by now mankind would get that if we continue down the path we are heading down, our children and our children's children will have nothing, we will have destroyed every natural resource we now enjoy.... OK down off the soapbox Karen
Karen
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Onto the podium you go!! I'd vote for you!! Thanks for the compliment on this one too! Glad you liked it! Gets the blood boiling Huh!! Don
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Such a wonderful write and you did grab more so from that pic than I for sure, I was more foccused on.. well wondering why mine dont stand like that anymore you know my wings...haha But trully is a great write, I can never seem to get a good poem across is so few words, you have a nack for it
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I've read your poems and love them!! Thank you for the beautiful compliment on mine!! Just love to write!! Thanks again my friend!! Don
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Brevity well done with its well rounded imagery.
Nicely done.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing fellow poet.
Virgoan
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Thank you Virgoan!! Always a pleasure to hear your compliments on my work! Don
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if I do not whisper
will you still hear my heart beat
know I am still alive
feel my tender fingertips
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I feel your heartbeat
Hearing whispers of it's cry
Tiny bumps rise
To the tips of your touch
Energy surges through
Each & every muscle
Casting electrified love
Throughout the universe
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How sadly true your words are. If we don't do something soon, we will be the ones to suffer. 95% extinction has already occurred...are we waiting to be the only living thing left. The earth will preserve herself...yet we shall praise.
Great take on the prompt, with very deep maening.
Excellent.
Thank you for entering!
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Thank you Mystic!! Very inspiring compliment and the Gold too! Man, this makes my day! Thanks for seeing the importance of this piece and it's message! Love Ya, Don
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I Hear You!!
Powerful piece Sweet Soul and Your voice speaks with volume but sustenance~~
Magnificent verse!!
Extinction inevitable if man continues to
live for greed...wanting power...
destruction the outcome
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
Keep that quill dancing my Friend
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings to You
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I Love the supporting compliments you send my way Desire!! This comment means alot to me as thisw issue is a serious one that should provke thought to all. Why worry about saving whales or global warming if we are headed for an overload due to the staggering power of destruction greed can bring overnight. There are mant issues to cover but priorities are confusing us all. thanks again my dear friend for you loving insight! Don
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OH WOW you are back and boy are you back....Brilliant write here the message the power of what you have said making me think long and hard. The artwork and lines perfectly support each other making this presentationYou nailed it greed i do believe will bring us down and i am not sure if we will have the strength to get back up.The short format packs a powerful punch i like that in a poem. thank you...good luck in the contest.
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Thank you Mook!! Always a pleasure getting your compliments! Love this one! And thanks for the inspiration you bring with you my dear! Love Ya, Don
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I AGREE WITH EVERY WORD!!
You are on a roll with these writes this morning, aren't you? But again, you are right! How much longer can we last? Not much I am afraid.
I mean when I moved here to NH. The area where I am, you hardly ever heard of any types of crime and violence, well in just the past 6 months, my bank, has been robbed like five times, we have had shootings at the local college, and BB gun shootings. It is out of control! I think a lot of it has to do with the way this world is going, due to the war, and all. I may be wrong, but somehow I don't think so. I think if Bush would concentrate on the economy here at home, and helping this country, maybe, just maybe, we would start to see a decline in the crime and violence, and more humanity towards others.
There I go again, off on a tangent...hehe.
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Thank you Nyetta!! Really got a number going on these poems tonight huh! The last one! Now off to sleep! Love your comment my friend! Got you going again though huh! Love your attention my friend, Don
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