The sound of thunder crackles your name,
calling me forth to assuage my rage.
Last words spoken should have been "I Love You!"
By the riverside we thought to be free,
our escape from evils grasping need.
I stand all alone in the pouring cold rain.
I searched, I wandered,
thinking only of you.
This cabin by the river built for you.
Now nights of loneliness seep deep into me,
the patter of rain my solace of you.
I miss you so much, these tears flood my brain.
Your liquid embrace is my comfort,
I give myself to your rain.
I'll be there in the downpour screaming out your name.
Author notes
response poem to hosts write...
"Love Lost in the Down Pour"
"'Meet me at the river,
there our hands will be clean'
The last words ever spoken to me.
I went out to meet you,
but 'hello' never came...
Love lost in dire the down pour of rain.
You waited, You wanted,
You thought to seek,
But you remaind there waiting for me at the creek.
The screeching of tires,
as the car skid to a halt.
They say that alcohol was at fault.
Im gone, not scared.
I just want you to know.
That I miss you terribly, I didn't want to go.
So on nights when you're lonley,
Give yourself to the rain...
I'll be there in the down pour whispering your name."
End.
A contest entry
- My First Contest! by I am Infamy.
450 points, ended November 20, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Magical. I loved it, the imagery was awesome.
On reading the poem it's a reply to, I also really love what you did with the end.. Especially the last line. Great write, well done =]
Hannu xxx -
amazing!
i have nothing much to say about this piece because i love it so much and it was simply perfect! and OMG, your picture was simply beautiful... it toally added an effect to this poem!
I love the structure of this poem... and i could feel the sorrow in the lines... but it was definitely beautiful! you had a great flow to this poem!
Thank you so much for this great read and entering this into my contest!
i wish you all the best in my contest!
Much love always,
Ranji
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This is awesome!
I loved:
"The sound of thunder crackles your name,
calling me forth to assuage my rage."
Great write. Good luck.
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WOW! This is wonderful...sad and deeply emotional. Love the last few lines, so very strong and heartfelt.
The rain being the only hope left to wash away the loneliness.
Beautifully moving!
I love this one.
Best to you!
Love
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spine shivering write hun with tears flowing of love lost -they say when it rains its angel's tears don't remember the exact quote or whom its by-- ironically i read this today of all days when I lost the one whom intimately had my heart to another. well done and many loving blessings always xxx
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wow, thank you for your entry!
i see the perspective you are speaking from... ver nice imagry. GOOD JOB! and good luck in the contest.
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