Heart folded well in castle stone
We fault you not for being there
We see your distrust and it's grown
Highness, do you see it there?
Gaze harshly down upon all shown
Uncaring, unable, unwilling to share
Demanding servitude from your own
Highness, do you see it there?
Sit high upon self righteous throne
Contempt for all who see you fair
Spewing words that crush to bone
Highness, do you see it there?
We hear you now, the constant drone
We feel your cold and heartless stare
Your unjust spite we have been shown
Highness, do you see it there?
"Leave" to us whispered winds have blown
And still you will not listen, will not care
Though soon to find yourself alone
Highness, do you see it there?
A contest entry
- A CALL TO WRITE FOR ALL WILLING TO ANSWER!!! by Artistic-Soul.
475 points, ended November 9, 2007, 16 entries
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Comments
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For myself, it's all about that repeating ending line within each stanza. That really gave the piece a strong foundation and made it seem well-rounded and complete. That beginning line is what grabbed my attention immediately, and even going through the rest of the poem, that line never faded from my mind. The perfect beginning to a really good poem. All in all, though, I thought it was the ending stanza itself that was the strongest. It really leaves an impact. Great write.
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hmmmmm interesting......very interesting
this is good stuff im impressed thanx for this entery and good luck
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