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what do you when

what do you do when
What do you when every thing seems to crash?
You feel like your losing
In one moment, every thing turns to ash
What do you do when you have no where to turn
Lost in this world
Your whole inner self begins to burn
What do you do when you are solitaire?
Again all alone
Threes never any one that will care
What do you do when you’re afraid to sleep?
What along night
Your left alone just to weep
What do you when you are no longer?
Comforted by the warm of the sun
It’s starting to get cold
Just makes you want to run
What do you do when you begin to fall?
I try to get back up and
Try again to climb back up that wall
What do you do when every thing gets in the way?
I try to hide
You just don’t feel like waking on this new day
What do you do when you are lost?
Help me find the way
I do what I can what ever the cost
What do you do when you have lost the will to fight?
Nothing gets better
Threes nothing around in sight

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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    I get like this alot so many questions and I never can seem to get the answer but have to go on you know life is hard it just is.It will get better just take a day at a time that is all we can do much loveCJ


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 9, 2007
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    VERY DEEP EMOTION!!!!

    I believe all of us have been in this situation at one time or another, I know I have many times. One must reach deep within themselves, into their hearts and find faith and hope and let them rise up and defeat the cruel and cold world that has fallen down around us.


  • PureRomance
    November 8, 2007

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    Awwww

    To tell you the truth. I'm going to answer some questions. What you do in these times is keep on fighting. Hang in there, don't lose sight of your dreams. This is an excellent poem. I love it. I have felt like this many times, and to tell you the truth what I did, was that I never stopped believing that things will get better, and even though they have yet to get better, I still believe and that thought helps me awake each morning with a smile in thinking that today is the day that things could finally work out the way that I want them too. I love this poem by the way. Keep up the excellent work. I can't wait to read more of yours.


  • D Saul So Sexy
    November 6, 2007

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