As pure as June’s beauty of white lilies
his face held beauty, gentle and mild
softer then the shade of compassion itself
where his façade blossomed like a fruit
his presence embedded the scent of season
I, the hills to the sunset of his beauty
Together I felt as if my heart held no pulse
as his hands of peace covered my heart
where I was mute to what was inside
but who would know that his heart was so
For his face held emptied in sound
a sound that couldn’t speak a word
My heart later chased the beauty I saw
because my days soon ran like a well
where you would wait for more love to come
Together on June's sidewalk, we walked
I knew his heart wasn’t for me
because truly his beauty drifted
Fooled by his presence then inside was I
Focused in the way his eyes duged a crow
Now as June leaves ginger to cool rays
the garden holds a rose in her sweet palm
memories places his lovely face upon it
“Oh rose do speak to me"
I say
So like that rose he was soundless
though seemed so tender...
Author notes
Option #8
A contest entry
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"Now as June leaves ginger to cool rays
the garden holds a rose in her sweet palm
memories places his lovely face upon it" i really like this part the wording is beautiful -
Very Poetic!
Very vivid imagery and emotions..enjoyed reading it immensely!
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Wow... so pretty much if you were trying to make me fall in love with you as a poet you won me over with this piece!
Very nicely done! I LOVE IT! It was just so deep and passionate... there aren't many words to describe how moving it was to read this. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This is exquisite!
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This is a wonderful piece. It flows nicely and has wonderful imagery. Has a tender feeling about it.
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This surely deserves some recognition in the contest. Deep and telling with splendid images throughout. I liked it. Couple of thoughts - not sure you mean "duged"? also you have two "soons" rather close to each other and it causes a hesitation in this reader. Thanks so much for sharing.
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This is a very well written poem, your discription is wonderful and the words flow nicely I think you have written an awsome write.
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Amazing :D
I love the words that you chose to use wonderful imagery i can see what is happening as i read the words amazing piece of work keep writing! -
Delicate and beautiful
This is beautiful. I loved the delicacy and the care you took in it. The calm words and imagery just made the poem even more spectacular. Thank you for entering xxx -
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So beautiful but you have to email the poem also to Bizpoetcontest@Gmail.com if you do I will be back to leave a very honest and complete comment...
Love, Raneika
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That was very beautiful. I love the lines:
Now as June leaves ginger to cool rays
the garden holds a rose in her sweet palm
memories places his lovely face upon it
Such a great use of words. Thanks a whole bunch for entering and good luck to you.
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