Champion
What doest thou fear Malady?
Give unto me the shadows and secrets of Thy dread.
Put upon me, with confidence, before my years abandon my youth
And valor becomes wanton folly within me, and
Before thine own eyes.
Slumber thou with ease fair Maiden.
I shall guard steadfast at your side until darkness dwindles.
Dream thou deeply of passion and frolic, apart from a world that wouldst suffer thee naught thy supplications.
Is it not my lot to champion thee?
Wouldst thou be blatant with position of thy course?
Nay! None other than thou wouldst deliver fairly my portion.
So it is with my life that I stand voluntary
For thy whimsy.
A contest entry
- PRE-WRITTEN POEMS ONLY!! GIVE ME YOUR BEST! by xXxIceQueenxXx.
800 points, ended July 31, 2008, 56 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on your bronze. I enjoyed reading this.
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Thank you so much and I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
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Thank you so much for your kind words and for opening this contest. It means so much to me as I have only been writing for a short while on this site. Your comments, as do everyone who critiques, give me inspiration to carry on
WoodsonRoundtree -
I love this poem! I am a big fan of classical poetry because I love the way you feel like you go back in time when you read it!
Thanks for entering my contest! -
Lovely Olde Worlde Charm!
Wow this is lovely on Olde Worlde Charm, brilliant ambiance and essence of the past and the finer side of poetic sculpting and artistry. Fab graphic use of descriptives and flow is great as well. Love it, well done its a masterpiece!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Since you were kind enough to read and comment on my poem "O Death," I thought I would return the favor.
You suggested I read this poem and give you an honest critique.
I found this to be a well written and beautifully metered piece. It is obivous that you are talented and exhibit the soul of a true poet.
Keep up the good work.
Drybones
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Thank you so much for your critique. It means a lot coming from some that paints word as you do. I look forward to reading more of your work. I just recently started writing poetry and I think "Champion" is my Fav. Again thank you and please "write on."
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I really liked this.. It was soft and yet had a sweet intensity to it as well.. I really liked the "old language" that you used as well.. It really went with the poem..Very romanic and sweet.. every woman needs a Champion..
you did a wonderful job.. I really enjoyed this.. thank you very much for sharing..
Angel
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Thank you for such kind words. I hope to see and read more of your work. I want to read work by everyone. So far there have been few that I don't like... Though a lot of the abstract poets make me feel inadequate because mostly I just don't get it I suppose. But again thank you so much and I will get back to reading more of your work
WoodsonRoundtree
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a good piece of poetry, though i was put off a little with the old language used, the way i look at it is this - we are living in the modern age not the 18th century so why use those old words in our modern day poetry? the poem is good, it just needs, in my humble opinion, an update to the present age. when was the last time you heard someone speak saying thee etc to you?
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I suppose some would be put off by the language. However, Wouldn't a Champion Knight talk of love in such manner? To pull him into this century would only serve to delete the romanticism. The last time I was exposed to this language was while reading a Shakespearean play. I do thank you for your input and though I don't agree with it I will defend to the death to your right to express it.
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do champion knights have to be in the past these are the new days, we speak differently now, though we may still be champion knights. i am all for romance, i love romance - it spurs me on.
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I LOVE IT
Your old English is wonderfully done.
I have a champion and even in this day and age
a woman needs the words of love, given pure of heart.
Take in simple thanks. Lovely, just lovely.
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What a lovely choice of words..again another stunning love poem..your ending is absolutely great..I enjoyed this piece very much
Ruby
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And again I thank you for your encouragement. This peace is one of my own favs. I guess I am an ole' romantic from the old school. Thank you again and I look forward to reading more of your work.............
WoodsonRoundtree
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Thanks for the nice compliment. Now and again my mind takes me to days when people talked in such manners. It is easy to loose the subject line when using this language.
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Wow! This is a beautiful poem, and the language is very lovely!
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Thanks loads DSSS, means alot to me that someone stopped by and maybe left with a bit of thought.......thats what is all about....again, thanks
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the first to stop by and commet on your poem think you did a smooth job on penning this keep the words flowing
stay up
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