Howling at the moon
I try and find my way.
Back through time
Though I must say
Its an unpleasant journey
That my mother
Must be very worried.
I'm sorry to say this
But I am sure that
I am not missed.
So I'll dwell on the past
Until I come back
So that no one will have to know
That I an here.
I do not wish
That I want a fish
Though it would be nice
To have some ice.
I just want to be
Reminded of me.
A contest entry
- revelations under tender light by unraveled.
800 points, ended November 11, 2007, 11 entries
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love it
it screams gohic band lyrics!!!!!!!!!
good lucj in the contest
*peace* -
interesting write, i see your train of thought here but i think this could be developed more. right now it's basically thoughts spoken out loud, i would love to see some more poetic language, emotion, etc. but, it's a good start, i like the part "so i'll dwell on the past until i come back so that no one will have to know that i am here".
thanks for the entry, cassidy
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