Though once forbidden, I slept jilted
and within my dream I awoke
as the wisp's will snared me into her grasp.
As snowy and a sandy-haired seductress
she exposed her revenant presence
as the first true royalty
to wend atop of unchaster nature.
It began as a devious grin,
but by the glimmer in abandoned eyes
it slowly transposed to her narcissism
and desire to possession.
I, mortally anemic, yet still with breath,
did not tug at my ethereal chains
as the hand of Inanna, gladdener of all hearts,
the maiden who has seized the light,
burst forth aglow to reveal my lust chance,
but seeded beneath the occult and her blaze
I sensed a newly stagnant discontent
of vexing the sons of man.
Bound and glinting in the gilded barrens
I pleaded her to leave the untilled sallow.
Well-nigh I had become Senoy, Sansenoy,
and Semangelof, so too the resenting chimera
metamorphosed from the spirit of unclean
to the eternally liberated screech owl.
To the den of fiend and villain
we descended beyond all earthly hope
to compromise the boycott.
In the heart of the crust and ore
I made my pledge to poor, poor Lilith.
A vow of balance and sameness
only in return for my own,
and as her courting endowment
I present to her Adam's head on a pike.
Author notes
Dedicated to Lilith, Adam's first wife.
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Wow, the last line is a kick in the face.
Lilith is one of my favourites in mythology, and you've done her justice.
This is a dark and sinister tale, and refreshingly accurate.
Very detailed, acute, and lush writing!
Bravo!
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You can find her in the Bohemian Grove. Also congress is in her belly. I present to her the middle finger.
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I was under the impression that the owl of the Bohemian Club was never addressed as anything in particular. Not even Moloch. Or were you talking about something else? Regardless, I wouldn't want to tick off a demon who controls your dreams.
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Bravo!!!
From the tittle to the theme, this is a good piece of work and for that with respect I bow...A round of applause for this masterpiece beautifully written...Deep, language usage, figures of speech...This is good poetry...Keep writting Poet and thanks for sharing...Shalom
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a good peice of poetry, the flow is smooth and sure and leads the reader down the page gently, a good poem.
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Great
I like the way you have done your poem it was well written and well planned. Well to me is looks like it was planned if not then great work in it. I loved the Flow of the poem it makes the reader not get confused on what you are trying to put forward. It was a great read from the very first line you had me hooked into reading it and that is how I noticed the great use of words and great flow of it. I think that a background may have made the words stick out a bit more. But none the less the poem is a great read.
I think Lilith would be very proud of the poem.
Great Job again.
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This is wonderful... your use of language is amazing... and the story you tell is brilliant... I really like the imagery and the flow, they work well together to create wonderful pictures in my my mind... I really enjoyed finding this!
Keep writing
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well, well! impressive verbiage, comrade. incidentally, you pulled it off, this doesn't come across as linguistic masturbation at all. pure excellence. you certainly can turn a phrase
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You've written poems about Lilith before I think.. I've always been fascinated by little pieces of myths and history.
This felt like a story as I was reading it, I liked how everything was described, you have such an amazing way with words, don't ever give up writing!
Kaitlyn
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Thanks for the kind words, Kaitlyn. Yeah, I've put her into 'Tiamat' and one other, I believe. But I decided to write one completely about her for a change. The story always intrigued me. I think I might put the basic story behind her on here to help people out with understanding this. Sometimes I study too much about what I'm writing and then don't explain enough for everyone to understand...
-Ryan
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