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Simplicity

Decisions made by choice of one
Wishing that our time was done
Call it quits, just forget
That we ever even met
I thought that I could love you once

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  • brightXdarkness
    April 2, 2008

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    I really liked the format of the poem in that the rhyme scheme and syllables. It all really fit until the ending. I don't know if you get this by reading it (since it is your own work) but it doesn't really seem like the end. I think the reasoning for this is mainly the rhyme scheme. Perhaps you can have a rhyme scheme that is more like - A,A,B,B,A - or - A,A,B,B,B - either way, I think it could be improved a bit more. But it definitely carries a lot of potential!

    Alex


  • Kati Kat
    November 9, 2007
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    aww this is really good
    although quite sad
    but still really good♥


  • Arizona Sunset
    November 7, 2007
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    Very wonderful really enjoyed this thank you for sharing ~blessings always~